you should continue this. it would make a great story

I like it.

And thanks for mentioning me. Very genorous of you

Thanks for the mention of me. Your Warhammer starfox cross was amazing, I'm writing one with one of my fav races, the Tau fallowers of the Greater Good, but I'm using my own hero Shas'o(Commander) Jason Ul'tan a Gue'Vesa (A Human who converted to the Greater good) leading a Tau colony force into Layat.

Keep up the good work. Write on in the name of the Emperor

Hey man!

I read your previous story, but I never left a review. So, I decided to review this one, and I must say, you still have it! I did find a few spelling errors, but nothing major. I do hope you continue writing.

Oh, and could you check my own story, "The Remnant"? Thanks!

Good to see that this is coming back! At the risk of being redundant, your writing style has greatly improved from that of the main fic. Good to see that the IG will be making its debut. I happen to own a copy of the Imperial Infantryman's Uplifting Primer, a good IG background book; if you want anything looked up on them, I may be able to help. Just FYI of course.

(this is KB3MJR) You are a very good author. The way you twist the two universes together is impecible. I suggest you add the Eldar in a sequel. And make a more distinct love triangle between Fox, Jacques, and Krystal.

As much as I appreciate your kind words; I do feel that you are somewhat 'milking' your story with this - you ended your main piece well; I would have considered it a classic had you left it at that; but I really, really don't like the way you've sort of stuck on all these extra bits throughout and before and after the story.

Keep it pure - that's what people love.

Well, well; what have we here? GamerJay back on track with his trademark Warhammer 40K/Star Fox-crossover! And I'm very pleased to proclaim the indisputable fact that this is quite a profound amelioration from your previous endeavour! ;-)

It's certainly apparent that you've learned from all of the tips and suggestions that you were given in connection with the first SF40K-fic. Now, you've really mastered the demanding aspect of writing, which is to depict the emotions and thoughts of your protagonists fluently and with detail.

From what I can see, your getting better really shines through in this piece, for instance with the way you describe the battle against the orks on Cerinia and Jacques' sleep-walking on the Great Fox. The way you described these things really made me feel as if I were there myself. You've managed to create an impeccable atmosphere with your new way of description, which fills every syllable of your story nicely. Great work there, my friend! :D

The only gripe that I have with this is how you change some grammatical tenses and make some minor spelling errors every now and then. As foxbird22 said, I suggest that you proofread a little closer, in order to catch those nasty slippery mistakes. But overall, I must admit without blinking that this bodes very well for the future. If this is merely a oneshot side-fic, which excellent result might a potential sequel not yield, then? :-)

Oh, and in regard to encouraging you and giving you support... You're quite welcome, my talented brother in writing. You've earned every ounce of it, that's for sure! :D

Best of luck to you with your future stories!

Sincerely,

SF Ghost.

I am very happy to see you have begun writing more Star Fox / Warhammer, GamerJay! I have been a great fan of yours for about a year, but you might not recognize me because I was previously an anonymous reviewer. Your legacy lives on with yet another great piece, and congratulations are in order.

You did a wonderful job on this oneshot, and I thoroughly enjoyed it. One thing you might want to do is proofread a little more carefully and check for grammatical errors. Other than that, the entire story was excellent, and I especially liked the end where Krystal kissed Jacques on the cheek.

I would also like to thank you for inspiring me to write my own story, A Collision of Worlds. You, along with several other mentionable authors, are responsible for my inspiration and sincere thanks are in order. Thank you so much for all of the great stories, GamerJay, and I hope your legacy burns brightly throughout a potential sequel and then some. I am looking forward to more of your great masterpieces!