that was so good! the pacing was very good and I loved the humor mixed in! though I do not like your Alice, when it comes to shopping and dressing Bella up. god she was so annoying! I wanted to slap her! Please make a sequel where she is put in her place! XD

Great story

Basic things like "you, your, you're" is problematic. I don't get how you cannot have that under control.

yes sequel please this story is awesome. Great work just some constructive criticism happy endings are awesome too

really? she said it again! ALL POWERFUL...she sounds so fuckig stupid when she says that
and really? triple vampire speed? really? fire, electricity and telepathy...REALLY its a bit much don't you think? and why cant she tell her dad? cause the vmpires said so? id think it would be up to his selene wouldn't it...actually since bella is "ALL POWERFUL" LOL its up to her...ya?

this could be a good story if it didn't come off so fucking immature...go back over it
bella shouldn't be "all powerful" or sound so fcking vain, the cullens shouldn't know what she is, having esme at the house and know everything about what she is was toooooo convienant...her name...vampire protector is dumb as fuck...thin again...and shouldn't selene be telling her what she is, her purpose not the cullens? yaaaaa

yaaa oookkk...esme just happened to be the only one home...and she knew what she was...and knew about the dreams...and really? vampire protector? seriously? you couldn't come up with anything better then that? and bells all I isbella am supposed to be a ALL POWERFUL CREATURE? um no...that's not what esme said you stupid little bitch...but then esme like...yes..
are you fucking kidding me?

WELL E STILL NEED A LOT OF THINGS TO HAPPEN IN THIS STORY LIKE HER HUNTING GETTING MARRIED AND A HONEYMOON AND FINISHING SCHOOL AND GEETTING TO KNOW THEIR NEW FRIENDS FREDRICK AND HIS WIFE

A SEQUEL TO THIS STORY OR TOTRIPPY BELLA? WLL LETS SEE HOW CHARLEY TAKES THIS NEWS

I WENT THERE YOU JUST HAD ONE CHAPTER UP BUT ILL CHECK IT AGAIN

WELL SHE GOT HIS WIFE OUT THATS GREAT BUT WHAT WILL HAPPEN TO THEM NOW THEY COULD BE THE BOSS OF VOLTURI NOW THAT ARO AND HIS ROTHERS AND GUARDS ARE DEAD RIGHT MAYBE FREDRICK AND HIS WIFE WOULD BE GOOD RULERS NOT BAD

GIRL YOUR NUTS YOUR STORY IS GEAT AND SO IS YOU BEING WORTHY OF HAVING A BETA STOP PUTTING YOUR SELF DOWN WHAT DID ARO DO TO BELLAS SHOULDER

IF SHE IS SUPPOSE TO BE SO POWERFUL HOW CAN SOMEONE MAKE HER PASS OUT OR EVEN DEFEAT HER AT ANY WAY OR ANYTHING

WELL SHE CAN PUT THOUGHT IN THEIR MINDS SO JUST WIPE ALL THE CULLENS OUT OF AROS MIND AND TAKE THEM AND WHILE SHES AT IT TAKE AWAY ALL THE MEAN POWERS THEY HAVE TOO

NO YOUR NOT SORRY I CAN SEE THAT EVIL LITTLE SMILE OF YOUR BUT THE CHAPTER WAS GOOD AND SEEMS LIKE ARO HAS A BLOCKER WORKING FOR HIM DOESNT IT WELL WELL WE JUST HAVE TO SEE WHAT BELLA CAN DO ABOUT THAT THEY CANT BLOCK HER CAN THEY

I LOVE IT BUT THEY FORGOT TO TELL CHARLEY THEY WERE GETTING MARRIED SO WHO IS AT THEIR HOUSE