Enjoyed very much, cringing at all the injuries. Tackle football w/no padding?! Alan was right, idiots. Loved the ending.

I love this! "Beating your brother - priceless" is my favorite line. Keep up the good writing!

I don't usually read whump stories or long stories, but this one was satisfying and worth my while. Keep up the great work!

Great story

Haha, this was fun! It took me a moment to realise that this was American football (as opposed to the British football), but I soon got into the flow! Poor Charlie! But he helped to take the victory, so kudos to him. Great story!

Haha I was laughing through this and cringing. Great story!

Good for Charlie! And good for Colby - don't just assume Charlie's useless! Loved the bit at the end too, I knew he would just be excited to have won...

Enjoyed, thanks for writing!

Amita was bit too much (there's a special kind of word I'd like to use on her, lol), but other than that, I really liked this. Yes, men indeed, but is it truly so bad? Lol. Good story.

I know very, very little about football, so I had to get clarification on the game. But, in all honesty, I found this immensely funny! The "Mastercard" moment at the end truly was priceless!

Hilarious!

haha. as bad as the ending of the "game" was, the ending of the story still made me smile.

I loved it! Haha this was great :)

Especially the last couple of lines "Beating your big brother at football -priceless."

Fantastic!

grooooan! I had to because of your punchline. :D
I Enjoyed reading this very much!

I'll favorite this when I'm actually logged on, I just couldn't wait to say that I loved it.

And bitchy Amita is totally realistic. Watching the series you see she gets like that sometimes. And I can't help but smile when I imagine how crappy she'll feel when she finds out he wasn't drunk. Thanks for writing, toodles - SS

Oh, the ending is priceless. :D Thank you for posting.