I liked your story until the end. Hermione and Voldemort should have won. You can't follow the bad guys like them and then not let them win. You should do an alternative ending if nothing else. But I did like the story until the last two chapters.

Lol hermione just sounds dumb. Why would she join DEATH EATERS...she's a MUGGLEBORN, if she even asked to join they would torture her to death. She's just going on a suicide mission.

Major: I want Lucius to kill Hermione's stepfather, after torturing him for what he did to her.

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE! Write the alternate ending.

Yes I hoped the dark lord and Hermione did won instead.

This look interesting

tears have been shed

Draco that bleeding SNAKE!

this is an awesome story so excited to read the rest! Eep!

Sad ending,but good story.

I didn't care for that ending there.

HER DAD?!0.0

Ok, I couldn't put down your story, it was really engaging and Lucius is definitely my favorite (minus the batshit crazy abusive father acts).. But I have to say that I was a bit disappointed, as much as I enjoyed it, it left me lacking, I was absolutely unconvinced by many of the plot points, I mean George turning on Fred is one of the examples..and the ending well I have mixed feelings about the epilogue, but I loved the parting words Hermione send to Lucius.

I absolutely adored this story. all ur othr reviews were rather condescending. i like short chapters in stories because then it doesnt drag on.

But this story is horrible!