Brilliant! You could easily continue this, add to it. I liked your idea about the dark temptations and powers of the Vault of Souls; an interesting interpretation of insipid power. Thorn's doubt and uncertainty seemed perfectly in keeping with his character, and I liked Murtagh's point about the Twins being killed by Roran, despite the lack of equality in the match. Brilliant job all round; I loved it. Thank you for writing it ) blessed be!

WOW! That was beautifully written and I admire how you portrayed Murtagh! Anyway keep on writing you are an awesome author!

~UmiChan

Very good! I'm glad you didn't imply male/male pairings in this story, I'm getting real sick of Eragon homosexual stories, sorry writers. Excellant, you should write more chapters to this one!

I really like your take on Murtagh. I'll probably give in to the temptation soon to write some Eragon as well.