the plot was truly cute

i do think you need to practice on slowing down a bit though... everything was very rushed.
the way Roy was holding Ed and calling him 'Love' in only about 2 days of dating... kinda made him seem like a very creepy clingy guy' and pretty sure the first time Ed thought 'i think i love him' they only knew each other for about 4 days? like i said, still cute, but it just come across as very unrealistic to me.
taking your time with making them fall in love, and even using time-skips can make it much more believable.

the sentences as well were vary rushed, going from outside, walking home, getting in bed, waking up, making coffee, going to work, all in the time spand of about 1 minute of reading... it made it a little hard to picture everything.

just slow down, and take your time with your storys

im truly not trying to seem rude :( its just advice, but you don't have to take it though.
besides, this fic is...5 years old? your probably better at writing by now anyway

Omfg that last chapter! I luv this story!

I love how the simplest things can be so confusing. (The ending when Ed left the table.)

Doooooo iiiiiiiittttt

im dieing

Does Ed still have Automail?

Very nice, liked how things were... sort of resolved with

I'd love a little epilogue! This story was so good c:

did they ever have that little family?
Did they get a boy or girl? Through adoption? Surrgent?
How many child did they decide on?
The dad still in their lives?

Hello, I couldn't be bothered signing in, but that is my name on this site. I just wanted to say what a fantastic story this is, and how much I have enjoyed reading it. My favourite ship in Fullmetal Alchemist is Roy/Ed and it is so hard to find good lengthy ones so this came at a great time. Just thought I would give you a little warning though, I couldn't help but notice you have authors note chapters. This is against the rules of fanfiction, but normally I don't care about that. But it has come to my attention a forum called Literaries United, a group that look for the small things that fanfiction says you can't do but people do anyway and what they do is report en masse any infractions. I would HATE for this story get pulled down, so just a but of friendly advice, perhaps you should take them down. This story is AMAZING, you write very well and it was a pleasure to read.

GreekGoddessHestia or Tashie

Absolutely fantastic story!

It is sooo cute, I can't help but love it!

And they're even married and had their honeymoon and awww I could fangirl forever over this!

Simply too cute!

So as for the epilouge.. I don't really mind.. as long as you write mooore.. well... maybe.. Ed cross-dressing or sth, or he and Roy being caught in the act, it's always funny

Anyways, I love your story! (:

If u look at the typo he said and now funny business!

Yaaaay!

Happy ending!

:3

:DDDDDD This was so freaking adorable :D And yes an epilogue please ;)

I am glad to see you updated even if I am a bit disappointed.

Ed's spacing out and memory lapses were never explained and I was really looking forward to finding out why he seemed so out of it or lost at times. I was also looking forward to finding out why Al was so protective of him (but assumed that was tied to the reason Ed seemed so spacy).

HoHo showing up was rather... jarring and after a year or two it would be hard to believe anyone could lose track of that much time (it seems like he was gone close to a decade... if not more) I think it may have flowed better if you could have given us a deeper/more through explanation for his extended absence.

I think your auto correct is changing automail to autodail so you might want to go back and edit that and re-upload the chapter.

I hope this doesn't come across as harsh but with a little work (if you so choose) I think this fic could close on an awesome note!