I think you wrote a really nice piece. I love the depth of thoughts and angst derek experiences. I hate how he hurt her though.

Really well written and it had no dialogue either (impressed).

I liked how it was in Derek's POV and it definitely had great insight on his hunger. D

Great one shot!

This was pretty good!

Good job!

Good job! Not bad. Good tension.

very good! I can feel Derek's confusion over his feelings!

Wow.

...I'm floored.

I really, really liked this. The whole no dialogue/names thing made it even better. I think they might have hindered the potential of the story if they had made an appearance. And you're right about the Amy thing - she's so small and insignificant to the plot (and yet insanely important because she contributed to Derek's plan) that her name had no effect on the feel of the story at all.

You've done a wonderful job and I hope you write more things like this. ]

That was ...whoa. That was well done.

WHile a two-shot would be nice, I think that having just Derek here helps with the effect.

I love the way that you wrote this in. It does give poignancy, while also a sense of mystery, a sense of seriousness.

The Hunger is also amazing. I like how you made Derek's hands "the bad guys" in the ways that he shows his emotions. While Hunger is a things that a lot of people feel, it's really hard to describe.

I'm totally faving this.

~VM

loved it update soon

I had almost given up on Dasey fiction because it seems like only 13 yr olds want to write, but then I see this and thank you. I now have hope.

Beautifully written.

very nice and i loved te angst _ tow shot would be nice i know i would read it _

Amazing. Simply amazing. I liked that there wasn't any dialogue. It seemed to enhance the story.

You are amazing... 'nough said

Love-love-LOVED it. It gave me chills and made my eyes sting with impending tears, and made my heart leap at the end. I loved it. Without the dialogue, it was perfect. I think words would have made it too casual, too outspoken, when really, this was a story of secrecy and silence. God, I adore this. I don't usually add fics to my favorites anymore (I ran out of most of the room ages ago), but this is just too perfect not to be put there. Wonderful, deep, and brilliant. I'd love to see Casey's perspective, but it was great without it. Amazing work.

~ Oasis

this is...this is...it mesmerized me. You captured the essence of forbidden love perfectly...what it feels like and what the implications are. What it can do to a person.