Ugh...their so dumb...of course he's not dead.. :(

You have a tendency to not capitalise certain words that require it, at random intervals: Turks, Cloud, I, etc.

Most of your portrays of people are somewhat off, too. Sephiroth is somewhat out of character, just the way he words sentences and things.

Zack is perhaps the only one mostly in character, though you make him jump to knowledge he wouldn't know. Sephiroth simply glancing at Cloud a few times and looking annoyed wouldn't automatically cause him to assume he was jealous, or longing for Cloud. It's a big assumption - and totally out of Sephiroth's character, so Zack wouldn't assume such things.

Turk wise, Reno is a little off, Reno is more stoic, conservative and professional.
Tsung is way off. He's a lot more professional, reserved, and direct. The way you portray his dialogue is a bit jarring at times - and I don't see it as anything he'd say, and for sake of story fodder, I'm aware you're wanting him to like Cloud, however, you could have executed it more fluidly and effectively.

I know you have a direction you want an idea, or story to go in, but you have to take into consideration the CHARACTERS and how they are, or it isn't believable at all. Sephiroth, and Tsung are very stoic and controlled - you portray them more as brooding or very easily angered.

All that being said, I have enjoyed reading the story, it's quaint and somewhat sweet.

Just wanted to share some constructive critique as it's not meant to be harsh, just honest and helpful to, perhaps, future writings.

*cries like crazy and adopts a reno personality* that shizz is emotional, you know? XD I eagerly await a sequel, if you havent alreadt written it *since i appear to be a few years late, haha* loved how you wrapped this up, never wouldve thought it'd have been from renos pov.
Nice job, seriously man, you rock. I'll have to log on and properly favourite this story.

As for checking out what other fics you have to offer- im eagerly on it. XD

Amazing, I simply cannot discribe the emotional roller coaster you have took me on these past few days I've taken the chance to read this.
The character development is on an insanely professional level, and each character you contructed is absolutely lovable -maybe appart from cloud at some points where i found him slightly frustrating- but still, the relationships between everyone is amazing. I fall before your intense skill *bows low* nothing will hit me more than that respect between tseng and sephiroth *A* that shizz was serioisly intense.

I personally really like how it ended there, reno's final message spoke volumes of high magnitudes, gjskeosakdjf stop making me sob damn it xD
i would love to have seen what happens next, but to my surprise, i have yet one chapter to go, andI both look forward to, and lament the fact.

This is so damn intense its unreal! I'm trying so hard not to cry like a complete idiot here! This is so damn emotional. I always hated scenes of war, especially in that of stories, as I found them one might describe as boring and meaningless, and while such a battle is meaningless, it is by no means boring in such a case as this. This has gotta be the most endearing thing I've certainly read in a while.
I don''t remember getting this far in the story having read it prior, but, im happy this time i chose to finish it. I'm looking forward to see how this might end. I imagine something bittersweet and i can sense that the outcome indeed will not disappoint my suspicions.

*sobs like a mad woman* not damieennn i feel like i only just met him D:

LMAO that was simply brilliant! XD I loved it omg vkasxiduferhteuiquzxdfher hahahahaha! Damien is just awesome too xD i love his flirtatious personality xD he needs sum lovin too xD

i wasn't expecting pda at all!

Woooo! Jealousy rules! Go cloudy! You rock!
Vhdsadriwuakder * holds undying love for your portrayal of sephiroth* why is he so smexy?!
I love never ending chapters xD that was super long abd awesome!
I love the rivalry between tseng and sephy going on.
Pure love! Too much love xD

I cannot express to you how much im enjoying rereading this xD I loved how sephiroth is constantly having that internal battle with himself, and when he loses it oh god *shivers* so endearing!

One thing that will always get me everysingle time; sephirooony! XD

0h my goodness *squeels like a totally crazed fangirl* I think I might've reviewed this sometime in the past, but wow, reading it now, feels like im reading it for the first time and damn this is amazing xD i love it! The heat between sephiroth and cloud is insane! The intensity between the battle of wits *tries to compose herself but fails* craziness! Love it! Can't wait to read more and rediscover what i've forgotten!

has the sequel started yet? I just finished Training and looked for it but I didn't see anything that labeled as a one for this story. I'm excited to know what happens next.

that chapter was so satisfying, though i'm glad they didn't kill hojo, he must suffer! I can't help that think he's gonna come back later though, i got a gut feeling.

The banter in this is just hilarious! I can't stop laughing xD especially when zack spouts out his infamous little lines xD

Tha quality of this chapter was exceptionally as good as the rest! - if not better! I quite liked all the conflict in emotions in this chjapter. Yay for tseng and reno! It's about time! Haha

Ooo mysterious indeed! I think i have an idea of who it might be, but we shall see

I really loved the banter at the begining between sephhy and zack! That was awesome! And oh the part where zack is all sulky with his stick in the sand! That was an absolutely hilarious image!

Aww poor Tseng! He needs a big hug! *coughs* RENO I THINK YOU KNOW WHAT TO DO!
It's really is paiinful the way you describe tsengs emotions. Loss is indeed a truely terrible thing.