Very well done
Captured the characters voices (several times I could picture the actors in that situation and hear them saying the lines)
The pacing felt very much like an actual episode or book
Loved the way you tried to blend the two universes - Connie was 'our' cop but Karen existed too
Really good read - thank you!

This is really good. I have to ask though, when you mentioned Jades last name, I had a sudden "Isn't that Cheshire from DC comic's real name?" moment, did you put Cheshire in this fic?

Okay. Yes, this story is awesome. You've got Dresden down pat (not hard, he's an easy-going guy.). The action was well intersperced with humor and characterization and you told a great story. I wish there had been more Bob, but eh.
Keep writing!

Great story! Absolutely fantastic! More stories like this pls?

This story is a masterpiece! Are you sure you aren't Jim Butcher in disguise? It is the perfect book/tv series hybrid. And written in the typical first person narrative which most people don't do, but you did it perfect. It was so Harry-like if you know what I mean :P. It had all the random thoughts Harry gets, and funny nicknames he gives people. It also had those funny end thoughts.. like where Harry thinks something hilarious and it kinda ends a train of thought/subject and the next paragraph moves on to something else. Butcher does that alot which adds to the hilarity of the statement. You did it in the "Get Anna a pony" line. Love how you sneaked McCoy and Ramirez in there too. I just loved everything. One of the best Dresden files stories out there and one of the best of anything I've read which is alot. LOVE IT!

Good story. I liked how you mixed the books with the tv show, although i missed the blue beetle. :)

Congratulations, you've mixed the TV show with the books in a coherent and nice way. Mazel Tov, and just so you know, I think I love you for it. *laugh*

It's a great story - written in Harry Dresden's IC voice, and... I lke the plot. :D Geez, I like everything and I think it's awesome *gives up on coherent - erm, helpful? - statements* and... you know, AWESOME! I like. A lot. xD

-Jaeh xD

Alright, so I was wrong. Her name WAS Connie on the TV show. How...UnMurphyIsh.

I was doing alright until the author changed Murphy's name to "Connie". WTF? I don't even think her name was changed in the TV show, so where the hell did that come from?

Wow. Just... wow.

Your Harry is brilliant!

I can't believe how perfectly you've managed to blend the book 'verse and the tv 'verse together, while keeping it all in the writing style.

This is one of the best pieces of fanfiction I've read in... well, years, which (for the volume I read) is saying something.

Fantastic.

Great fic! Like the 42. I have like 3 shirts and a towel that just have "42" on them. Not many people get it, but maybe they just know the correct question so it's good that they don't know the answer. Great fic. I think I'm going to start reading the books again, if I budget the time right I'll be just in time for the next book.

Aw, Harry's poor again. *sigh*

Loved this story! It's like reading a Dresden Files mini-book! :) You're such a great writer and you're constantly making me laugh!

Lol! Love the Sid says "slap"! Great!

Very much liked Ms. Sharp's saving the world explanation. Very sweet.

Mai looked as though she wanted to eat me.

*ponders* Yea. I can see that. :)

Mai broke out her angry demon face and he cracked.

*continues pondering* Sounds about right.

“I’m sorry, sir.”

“What are you apologizing for, now?”

“It’s preemptive,” I explained. “I’m about to pass out on you.”

Quite Harry-like.

Great chapter! I love the explanation for everything that was going on, putting all the pieces together. You did it very well. That's something I usually have trouble with - coming up with a plotline that makes sense and develops well and at the same time having it be complex.