Not gonna lie, towards the end I was getting really confused. This is VERY stream of conscious (sp?) to the extreme, but I like it, even if the disorganization made it hard to understand at times, but I loved reading it. :)

Favorite line?

Falling is not ripping wings away from someone.

Falling is realizing that someone is terribly, terribly wrong.

I have no idea where you get these amazing stories from, besides your amazing mind. Wonderful, touching writing once more.

I may be in love with you,

Spiral- chan~

:D

Wow, Nice story, very in-character.

Seems to show how really off-the-point that Sasuke is. It is a different way of writing and I enjy that type of writing and wish I had a good talent at it like you; alas, I can't write a story like the type you write without it sucking like a baby on its foot.

Anyways, thanks for writing such a wonderful story.

PhoenixKeir

I'm not sure I understand, but I love it.

I would even say it's not a story, it's poetry... I loved every word (no, every letter of every word) of it. I read it, then read some bits of it again - it's like breathing a different kind of air when you encounter such different kind of a fanfic. It's beautiful, a bit confusing and really-really something I needed to read for a very long time. Thank you so much for writing this!

3 word: What. The. Fuck!

Woah...that was different.

Uh... what? I got to the end of number one before you lost me... I tried to be found, so I read on, but, I think I just got more lost... way too confusing.

i dont quite get parts of it but its interesting, well written, and i like it. :D

keep p the good the good work!

woah. trippy. i loved it...first good sasuke angst i've read in awhile

This is the part where I realize what a master you are at creating aching, broken works of art that are more beautiful than if they had been whole and gush about it to you in review format.

And so I have.

Congratulations, for you have done something so very few dare to write: a contemporary poem out of an anime, and actually pull it off. If you were someone I know, and is actually located in the same country as me, I'd tell you to write stuff for our magazine.

You know your enjambments, your alliterations and sheer poetic essence. Please continue with your work, and someday compile all of them into a book I can see in the stands and buy and keep to sustain my mind. :)

This requires a second reading.

Loved the chemistry bit, love how Naruto invades his mind.

hm loved it.

the disconnected thoughts seem very much like Sasuke.

(even though a genius[i suppose.], doesn't seem to think things through). fragmented, like your work. which is lovely.

This is so beautifully written. I love the way you sort of capture Sasuke's whole personality, not so much in what you say but more in the way you say it, the disjointed phrasing really shows how messed up he is, because you know that he's totally crazier than both Naruto and Sakura combined!

I love the way he focuses on his height like a measure of his power, whether he's tall enough/good enough, and then he notices that Naruto is taller. And I love that he's tired. And that he blames himself for is parents being dead. And that he's angry about the fox symbol.

Actually, I don't think there's anything I don't love about it. It's perfect and absolutely beautiful.