Very nicely done:)

I usually don't read stories where Ed is straight, but this one managed to make me love it. The pairing, too, even thought there are only 2 in existance...

*nightmare?

I thought this story was so wonderfully written (you are truly talented)...I really did enjoy this

I didn't expect to like the Edward and Elysia pairing but, oddly enough, it really worked out well. Another great story!

Oh great, whats going to happen now.

Keep going.

NEXT

:)

They are so sweet.

Keep writing stories.

On to next chapter.

:)

Oh god, please no. Ed and Elysia? -shiver-

it's jusst amazing...I can't find words...I read the Drachman War first so everything fitted in easily...but maaan when I read it it really looked like a novel or something inspired from real-life...so detailed all I can say is WOOOOOOOOOOW I love the way you write I don't like to pick a side so to speak but I think the Drachman War is the best I would really read it if it was a book...you arejust to great ;)

just as with the drachman war... i am back for another round with this one and will finish with the black prince... if i havent said so before... these stories are seriously some of my favorites! and are the standard to which i compare all fullmetal stories... and many i have found lacking! you are super talented!

Hiya! I've now read the Drachman War and this story, and I fell in love with the way you write! I really love these stories, they keep me going during the long, dreary days and I wanted to thank you!

You are an incredible writer, all of the characters are different, but because they grew up, and that's a nice thing to see that they came to. I wish you luck if you ever decide to start (or have already started) a writing career!

..."Loose" relationships? 0.o Not Ed. Mustang has "loose" relationships. Ed does not. Ed... actually, doesn't have relationships at all. At least, not the way you mean. Maybe, once he found the Stone, he would. But I just don't see him as the type to have "loose" relationships. Or, maybe that's my semi-fangirlism talking. -shrug- But still...

And since when does Ed smoke? Again, smoking is just not the sort of thing I could see Ed doing. For starters, I can't believe that they don't know how badly smoking screws with your body... and I can't see Ed smoking, knowing how awful it is. :/

Ed's not the alcoholic type, either... He likes cards, so I can imagine him gambling, but not drinking alcohol. Like I said, I just can't see him deliberately doing anything that bad for you.

Besides ANYTHING, Ed is not taller than Mustang. That's not even a matter of 'probably'. He just ISN'T. That is a fact of life. If Ed ever got taller than Mustang, it would violate the laws of the universe. Because, even though he's only sixteen in the anime, he's STILL way shorter. And people stop growing at either eighteen or twenty-one. So, Ed might grow enough to be "not short", but Mustang is tall.

Agh. It's well-written, but towards the end of C2... Commas, please. And there are runons. -shudder- Runons and fragments are the bane of every reader.

...This isn't going to be ElysiaxEd, is it? Ed's twelve years older than her! Creepy...

GWAH! No capitalize Father... Make me think of homunculus-leader-person. Not Hohenheim.

I really enjoyed this story! I didn't know about an EdxElicia pairing and how I'd feel about it, but you wrote this one very well! Good job! :)

I have read the whole shooting thing so many times! awesome story. btw, I don't know if it was in this chapter or the last, but "week" should be spelled "weak" as an adjective. ciao!