Capitalize Holly

Aw! I love the whole concept of this. I would ask for an update, but for the fact you have a sequel out, indicating its finished. But still, a very original idea.

PLEASE?

PLEASE!

PLEASE?

This was very interesting!

I thought this story was very well written and original. I really liked it! The random messages through time were very interesting!

consider yourself poked into submitting. sorry i couldn't help myself. anyway great story and neat idea. i look forward to reading more

Interesting, very interesting. Putting on story alert.

Um, if this is during Book 5 when Artemis is in Limbo, some corrections:

Holly is there with him.

Commander Root is dead in book 4.

besides that, cool story.

LOVED IT!

This is great love it make sure you finnish it and send it to me ok

Firstly, boring stuff.

Spelling and grammar:

The phone kept beeping its quiet message to the world, kept trying to tell its owner that there was a message waiting for them, someone trying to talk?

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Break up this sentence into a few parts, it's a run on.

…someone trying to talk? Share feelings? Argue?

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Who is asking these questions? Why are they important? Only add a line if it builds character or moves the plot forward.

All the random, disjointed text throughout time, the letters you burn before you send them, the drafts that don make the final cut.

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'Don' should be 'don't,' you can take out the 'them' after 'send,' and avoid saying 'you' in a 3rd person narration.

Artemis, I don’t know if this message will even reach you, my recycle bin is full of messages I couldn’t send, who knows, maybe this one will reach you!

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A run on. Feh. You say 'reach you' twice.

Okay, now that the technical stuff is out of the way, may I just say that I WICKED love this? The writing could use a little work, like you said, it's almost a drabble, but the ideas are golden. I love wondering whether Holly actually sent the message, or just though about it, I love the jumble of other messages before hers, I love that it begins and ends with 'beep.' Woot.

Respectfully yours,

Feather La

wow! nice chapter! here is an idea... what if the phone came back to Holly years after Artemis had died? or he is still alive.

I like it its totally random with messages from everyone, it gives a little insight into what went on white Arty was away.

Michelle