well...that escalated quickly...o_o ...AWESOME...

Worst. Fanfic. Ever.

I liked that.

Poor sasuke,

but it ended up very sweet in the end _

Good job

I'm really glad you didn't put a "lemon" in here, it totally kills a story, and cheapens all of it. Especially in a one shot, with no time skips.

On another note, your characters were really weak. No depth whatsoever, and Naruto was the worse. It made no sense, and Naruto came off as a complete idiot, lust-ful, bastard, and so on and so on, and you did not explain his intentions whatsoever.

um it was okay nofing specail sweet tho.. um it would be ebtter if naurto didn't like sasuke so mcuh more of a plot.. but yeah.. it was okay

aw! kawaii! i absolutely

u know u could have put the lemons in there but still i loved it

Cute. Didn't really seem like M material, but I still loved it.