Mmm. Nice ending. I like. :)

Again, I want deeper and darker. Maybe now that our older you could rewrite this and show us what ol' Lokzul is really feeling. This story has so much potential, don't waste it.

Mmm, no. Not depressing enough. You need to show the full extent of his pain. Its a good fic but it needs to be deeper and darker.

Hmm, needs to be darker considering the situation. Good tho.

Awesome. I loved how you showcased Optimus as a leader. My only regret is that there isn't a more spiritual connection between a True Prime and other Cybertronians. heh.

Ok, this is an awesome book! Is there another one?

I loved it, this was a great story, I hope u write more like this :D

Too bad your not doing a sequel, I just read this entire story in about less than an hour and I love it! To me you did it perfectly, I've been looking for a story like this (without any slash trash in it) forever! Thank-you sooo much! :D :D :D

good story so far

nice. You might want to remove the song lyrics though... this website... i fear, might delete the fanfic due to the song lyrics...

nice

I like that. Starscream is my favorite character, and I like the way you re-did his character. Great story.

Spark

lmao skywarps so funny

boxing pose? lol

“Yeah? Well patience is something I don’t have, so they better quicken the pace... for their sake.”

“Correction: For your sake.”

LMAO, ah, good old Soundwave...

great story! loved it!