nice

love the chapter...poor Shinju...wow... whats going to happen next...plz updata soon

plz be so kind as to continue this story Gunslinger iris-sama. lol that souded so weird and formal! lol but seriously, update plz! cant wait for the next chappie yupp yupp!

(_) spazzy

Are you still writing this story? Please be still writing this story, don't give up on it! (insert random chibi-fied person crying a waterfall of tears)

If you don't keep you'll probably end up drowned in tears; it's a good story and deserves to be continued. You're a good writer and know how to use punctuation, please update soon! (insert random chibi-fied crying/begging on knees person)

UPDATE! CANT WAIT FOR MORE! LOVE IT! :D I'm really curious as to how you made naruto (?) pale skinned, dark haired and whisker-less (or did I miss understand!) SO PLEASE UPDATE! :3

You have a good plot, and good writing skills. This story is very well written, maybe a bit too quickly mashed together. Think it over, but update soon...I liked it!

Ita-kun! Shinju Nemuri eh...weird but cool

Anyways, the part where she was with Sandaime-sama (Jii-chan .) was a bit rushed, especially how quickly she got over it, even if she is still sad. Other than that the story has promise.

Keep going, keep going.

Nemuri Shinju? Black hair? Itachi, ANBU Commander, warning two pedos? He would kill them on spot. You are creating entairly new characters with completle new personality's, it seems. And this demon-killing scene was so cliched _

I won't say anything about grammar/spelling blah blah mistakes cuz I suck at Enlish I'm willing to give it a try. See ya (probably) in next chapter.

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Mm, kinda cliche...

I find this interesting and will keep an eye (or both) on this one. It sounds great.

wahh i wanna know what happens...i really do wanna know! please update soon!