“What kind of girl doesn’t like pink?”
“The best kind”
- Right. Cause that makes her better, smarter, kinder and just more than us. Why do they always bash us pink-lovers?

For an imprint story this is ok - not bad but not great either. There are a few things that "defiantly" need editing but overall it was a nice read.

Throughout the story there were some glaring discrepancies though. I feel like you switched back and forth with characters' personalities maybe in effort to make them more relatable. But Paul kept going from angry and hot-tempered to sometimes calm and collected. Your OC, Maggie, is 100% relatable - props for that. It's their relationship I personally found somewhat unrealistic. They don't seem to work
together for me at least. He just says he loves her but never in the story did I feel like "Yeah, boy, you go get her!" you know encouraging him or loving him (his character, I mean). His character is written a little bit poorly and not at all good for Maggie imo.

Thank you for the read, though!

You do realise 'defiantly' & 'definitely' are 2 separate words?

how can she say she doesnt like Forks for the bad rainy wheather yet she is going to England for collage...a place well know for its BAD, RAINY WHEATHER...?

i already hate the oc...i love my grandparents...she seems like a heartless b*tch

Like the introduction to Laura's gang instead of the same old thing with Bella's friend group

Oh my god! I just finished the epilogue and I LOVEED IT! Favorite Paul imprint story of all time. Your writings skills are really good! I was addicted to this all day! I couldn't stop reading it! I'm glad you finished it too. It's annoying how sometimes you find a story that you like and only to figure out that it wasn't finished.

i thouht this was pretty good

Loved it

Paul is really being the perfect boyfriend.

I think potraying someone who represents a minority (like Scott gay guys) is difficult in stories, though it is important. But if you make a minority character stereotypical it's unfair to the fact that all humans are unique and then if they aren't any different from anybody else that's wrong too.

Maggie seems really cool with it all, maybe she should have freaked out a little more.

Poor Paul. Good writing.

You're making me hate Sam.

Sam's secrets are never to be shared is sometimes way out of line