Pls update

Just wondering if you will ever come back to this story it is GREAT SO FAR

I find it very hard to believe that Edwards entire family and his fucking mate would allow Tanya to put Edward under a spell. They would stop her, get rid of her, or kill her. But you have her living with them...going to their school and no one is doing a damn thing? Ya fucking right.

This is getting so goddamn stupid.

That's Tanyas power...seriously?
how fucking gay...this was better when Edward was just a prick fucking Tanya cause he could

Too bad this story isn't clearer. When did Edward cheat on bella? When did he get engaged to Tanya? Did he really fuck Tanya? That's so fucking gross...and explains nothing. I don't see how fucking could stop him from going insane...and it didn't work anyway did it?

So you want us to believe that bella was JUST changed and already back AT SCHOOL? Ya fucking right.

WTF?

Just what has he been doing all this time that hes no longer a gentleman? And what does he mean forced to leave bella?

it took me a while to remember but ive read this before...its so unbelievable. Like all the cullens and bella would allow Tanya to stay while Tanya has Edward under her little gift. they would have killed her along time ago...

I love it so far!

Wtf shes a fucking bitch

What?!

Jacobs such a fucking prick im going to kill him! So now edwards leavig again?!

I hafe jacob bella and edward in this

Started off with plenty of promise.

You have great writing skills, I kind of thought this would be a sort of Yandere kind of Edward thing, which I'm all for IF it is done correctly. And sadly you did not pull through. From the first chapter I thought that you'd understood the severity and depth of vampire mates in the Twilight universe; but unfortunately you began throwing around the idea that Edward (or any mated vampire in the Twilight universe, for that matter) has even the slightest capability of being unfaithful. Yes, I understand that you have warned readers that this story is twisted, but I must admit you were quite misleading with the initial idea of Edward's dedication and emotions for Bella.

One thing that really crawled under my skin was the fact that you made vampires so very indecisive and HORRIBLY unstable. I mean, one fact that stated constantly in the books was that Twilight vampires find it VERY difficult to change! Then you present Edward as a vampire who cannot make up his mind about who he wants to be with, and on top of that, after several DECADES of him being perfectly capable of defending himself from Tanya, now he's suddenly as defenseless as a twig?

For these reasons (and many more) I seriously think you should not have deemed this a Twilight fan fiction because there's simply too many aspects that are not even remotely CLOSE to what would ever happen in the Twilight universe. I sincerely admire your writing abilities but there's so many horrible actions that you made these characters carry out. Actions that they wouldn't ever really do, and this outweighed your talent.

I truly do wish you'd rethink your view of certain characters, because the way this story was panning out, it would have been miles better if it were an Original Story entirely as opposed to calling it a Twilight fan fiction when in reality the only thing you're using from said universe is the characters names and their appearances.

Thank you for sharing your ideas with us, you have a truly astounding skill when it comes to emotional immersion, the only problem is consistency throughout stories :)

Sincerely
Abandoned-bicyle

Please tell me your still writing this?