Idly rereading this after... something like five years? I've just remembered how completely miserable I felt about how Hayate was treated. Her earnestness and devotion to Tomoyo was just such a strong part of the plot, I feel like she deserved better than she got. And imagining how she might have built an equally strong bond with Sakura has me pining for what might have been.

Oh wow...
So Hayate's basically Nozomi from Love Live...
Kansai dialect, largest chest, team leader, straight as a rainbow... Don't forget the Washi Washi!

Well I have to say, while I am enjoying the chemistry between characters and the plot, while mildly contrived, is still entertaining, the ending for this chapter was (almost) the biggest ass pull I've ever seen. The build up earlier in the chapter seemed to suggest that maybe there would be some development, perhaps a delaying and eventual cancellation of the wedding once they had realised their true feelings, but all we got was a "and Shaoran only loved her for her power so she left him" stuck at the end, used almost like a "Get Out of Jail Free" card.

I'm hoping with that out the way, the rest of the fanfic will be able to redeem itself as I was really enjoying it until it drove off the cliff...

Rereading this story.
That last line. Maaaaaaan. So good.

Fantastic story. Here are some things I liked:
1. Believable removal of Syaoran. That kid's one of my all-time favourite characters, and you wrote him out in a way that made sense, and wasn't angsty or unkind.
2. Awesome development of Tomoyo and Sakura's relationship. The way it grew in the last few chapters was very well-handled.
3. ADORABLE NanoFate fun the whole way through.
4. Great Vivio, although I confess I kept picturing her at different ages throughout the story.
5. Such a believable crossover. The concept alone is completely believable, and the execution was flawless; it felt so natural to have the CCS characters existing in the MSLN world.
6. The speed with which you wrote this! And the freedom with which you approached it. You really let the story go where it wanted to, and, as such, the whole thing felt very natural.
7. Tons of other things. Body memories, Kero, Hayate, T&S's intelligent devices, everything.
Thanks for this.

Okay, ever since you added a gentle grey turtle and a honking ostrich into this story, it has become one of my absolute favourite stories on this site. Oh my gad. Adorable, sweet, funny, and totally believable.

I really like Freya.

I love how you're writing this story. The characters are delightful, and the interpersonal conflicts are believable . Fantastic work.

This is a very good story, i specially liked the last two chapters. Very good work.

Shiro is a filthy, homophobic, heteronormative, sexist, controlling, and all around revolting bastard in this chapter. A "bona fide man"? An omiai? Needs a grandSON specifically? And he can't get one from Kyouya or Miyuki? It has to be from his lesbian daughter? Fate has to wait six months for no good reason? You know, Shiro, Fate didn't even have to come and ask you guys first. She went out of her way to organize a trip to earth to offer you this as a courtesy. People rarely ask their fiancee's parents before proposing these days. Also, there is no reason in the whole damn universe that Fate can't hold up to any guy. And Nanoha and Fate probably would never have biological children, because Fate is big on saving orphaned children on account of her past. Having a biological child would do nothing but allow a kid to NOT be adopted (I'm adopted, so I react really strongly to this topic, especially in relation to gay couples).
Seriously, I'm extremely angry right now-chiefly because of how disgusted I am at Shiro. I don't care if he was just playing the "protective father"; that's a flawed role, anyway, intrinsically. He did not have to make even light jabs at sexuality when assessing Fate's proposal offer. But he did, and he effectively also insinuated that the female sex was inferior in some way to the male sex.
This review is several years late, I know, but I couldn't take this sitting down.

ON ANOTHER NOTE ALTOGETHER, I adored the Vivio and Nanoha interactions in this chapter; they were precious. And Nanoverse centric chapters tend to be a good thing in any crossover fic ;p

What a disgusting contrived plot device to bring the girls together by suddenly and randomly portraying all boys as flat, cliche, horrible, disgusting constructs. All done in contrived, unnatural, girl conversations, which also make the girls look like horrible people. Impressively immature, good job.
And here I thought I would enjoy this one. Sadly, I was mistaken.

The best crossover I ever read. Love the pairing very much. Nanofate all the way. Not to mention sigmal and sakuraXtomoyo is the next fav pairing in this fiction. Thank you very much for this wonderful one.

You say "omake", but I really don't mind the idea of a trinary system with Tomoyo at the centre. That poor girl deserves all the happiness the multiverse can muster and then some. And unrequited Hayate is too sad. :(

Now I remember why I dropped this story. I didn't like how you portrayal of Vivio. And who the heck is this OC Misaki kun? Seriously. I hate OC.

Sakura and Nanoha meet in Magical Battle Arena.

"She didn't like the idea of Tomoyo possibly becoming a casualty of war, like Sakura nearly escaped being."

I just wish to point out that Sakura did escape becoming a casualty of war.