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Love it

This should be a story, it's so fucking good

GOOD

It was good and you could have drawn it out a littel more even if it was a one shot

It's a good start, but it was pretty rushed into action. The characters were very believable though! Along with a good scene. Practice writing more, and you'll get better at it!

I like how Sakura was the dominant one.

For your first lemon it was pretty good :D

I really like the plot in this story, but you have got to work on your grammar and spelling. . the letters "r" and "t" are right next to each other on the keyboard. You kept misspelling "her" (your write het over and over"). And "hard one", it's written "hard on".

I'm not trying to be mean or anything, I just want to give you advice. It's up to you to use this feedback or not :)

If you have any questions regarding spelling or grammar you can ask me :) or you can look up words at www. , a splendid site that is easy to use.

Good luck with your future fan fictions! :)

w-wow tha-t was g-good *blush* your a good writer at this stuff *blushes harder* so ya heh.

oi that was good i liked it

a few spelling errors but I could see Kakashi refusing to have sex with her...very much believeable and not too OOC. I commend you.

that is amazing..

nice but you did rushed in to action. anyway, nice work! thumbs up!

OMG, im a fan of kakashi. so sakura he's mine!_