Oh nooooo why did you stop here! OTL I really wanted to read the rest. It's a good story, I liked it.

I hope this story will not be so because it made me interesting, besides that Toshiro wants to end their relationship completely with Kusaka and empazar a fresh start with Ichigo, I hope these two can be together, please below.

Dude,seriously? your just going to leavve shiro-chan (aka,my little tweety bird) as a trainwreck mess like this? Hum,you seem to have a knack for this but,um,UPDATE,PLS? I have fallen in love with ur fic,seriously. xD so come onnnnn! :(

Update?

K im just saying FUCKIN UPDATE PLEASE! and waahh this is so sad dont let toushi-kun become so heart broken. oh yeah wah happened to kusaka. I hope the stupid bitch(kusaka obviously-_-) dies again and go to hell and get tortured by lucifer in eternity leaving only pain and suffering for him to feel!

yeah if you like kusaka im sorry for saying dat. hehe I kinda snap sometimes

I like it! I'd hoped there was more of Kusaka though... Update soon!

great chapter. update soon _ Ja. PS i hope Ichi...or Shiro, get to kill Kusaka (or at least severely injure him).

So Kusaka didn't show up at all? Is that why Hitsu is mad? Overall, continue...I'm waiting for the next chapter with great anticipation.

Well, I'm sure interested in whether or not their relationship will bud. I'm still a little irked about how OOC everyone is though. I understand that in order for this pairing to work, you have to tweek their personalities a bit, but they don't even really appear to be the same characters anymore. On future stories, try to keep this in mind.

Anyway, good luck with the rest of the story.

HAPPY WRITING!

I really liked this chapter, all the way until the end anyway. No wonder Hitsugaya didn't want to get "prettied up". A dress? Erhm... I think that's taking it a bit too far, and I don't think that Hitsugaya would've given in that easily either. But whatever... that's more of an opinion thing, so if you like it, then good for you. :D

On to Chappie 5!

How can one have their hands on their hips while at the same time pinning someone to a fence? O_o? Just wondering... it sounds a little odd.

Make sure your sentences are complete and aren't run-ons. I know I'm harping on you a lot about grammar and technical crap, but that's the main thing that needs to be worked on.

I would've imagined that Toushiro would've been more cold. If Kusaka really did cause him that much pain, then wouldn't he have been more bitter at Kusaka's question. Toushiro usually comes off as a bit mean when he's trying to hide his emotions, or at least that's what I came to think. You may have a different interpretation, which is perfectly fine.

You do a good job at drawing in attention and holding on to it. I know you have other stories to post for, but you should try making your chapters longer. If that means there will be more of a wait in between posts, then so be it. I feel that you're just giving us the bare minimum of information. Get more into it and draw us into the story even more. _ I'm sure you can do it.

CHAPTER 4, I'M ON MY WAY. XP (i know, i'm lame.)

DAHM YOU KUSAKA! QUITE MAKEING LIL SHIRO CRY!

UPDATE SOON PLEASE!

_ Short chapter, ne? First thing... technical errors.

When you have to adjectives next to each other to describe one thing, you don't put a comma in between them. For example... you put (her humongous, exposed breasts...) Take out the comma. I look at it like you're taking pause there (which is what you supposedly do with commas). Just thought I would point that out since no body pointed that out to me until... well, I found out by reading a stupid grammar book. .

With Ichigo... try to not have him sound so desperate. Ichigo is the one who tries to keep his emotions and agenda hidden the most, even if he does suck at it.

Relax with the adjectives. You describe the characters a bit too much for such short chapters. It isn't really necessary. Mention their appearance here and there, but then maybe stick to emotions and gestures or something like that.

Interesting chapter. Toushiro has a diary? O-O I'd like to see what that looks like. XD Sounds a bit too feminine to call it a diary, but then again, it was said from Rangiku's perspective and that sounds like what she would call it. Lol.

ONWARD AGAIN! .

Heya! Interesting so far. My only concern is that the characters are OOC. Toushiro is coming across as way to feminine, in my opinion anyway. Both characters can be hostile, which I think you've shown, but I think Toushiro tends to be more emotionless if he's not snapping at someone. Lol. Also, be careful with your choice of adjectives as the narrator. Maybe in dialogue, the characters can use descriptions such as dainty and baby. It seems to me that you're belittling them (mostly Toushiro). It's nice that you're using different words to describe him, but sometimes it's better not to use any at all if it's going to change his character.

Anyway, I'm still fairly interested in what will happen. Good story line and you've caught my interest on the first chapter (another very good thing).

One more thing before I continue on to the next chapter... Be careful that you're not repeating yourself. Sometimes you say one thing and then you repeat it a sentence or two later (it's just phrased differently). It wasn't too bad, but I thought I would give you a heads up for future chapters.

Now then... ON TO THE NEXT CHAPTER!

wow. This is really good. :) Please update soon. aw, Toushiro in a dress is really cute. :3 Although...I don't think that his hair should be spiky when he's in a dress, at least tame it down alittle. But...I shouldn't complain! Spikes or no spikes, I like it all the same. :) Great job!