CAT-PIG! xD

That was disgustingly BEAUTIFUL fluff! I thought at some parts that a cliche moment was coming but I rather like how you went with this story. Love it love it! My first fanfic of Neku/Shiki and I am most pleased. Well done! I'd love more! xD

A Nice little cute epilogue to a really great game! Good Job! )

He counts a little faster, even though he doesn't mean to, "S-Seven,"

I laughed so hard, i fell off the couch

This was so sweet I almost got cavities. Loved it to bits!

Do want~ 3

Very nicely written! 8D

I like your writing. Despite the distinct lack of paragraphs, not once did it feel choppy. The descriptions are efficient, the narration quirky, and I can picture it all in my head as smoothly if I were watching a short movie. Plus, I just love your characterization of Neku along with the way you presented his thoughts. You know, I think I’ve really and truly fallen for this pairing, thanks to this “disgusting [piece of] fluff.”

There are two things that bother me. The first is the amount of ellipses in this fic. Reading it over, it seems excessive, but since they help illustrate Neku’s thought process, it’s not such a bad thing, I suppose. Still, please think about cleaning up the little typos that are scattered about in this fic, if only for the sake of it looking more professional and spiffy. XD

The second is the fact that this happens right after the Game ends. If this took place a little further into the future, it would’ve made more sense in my opinion because then Neku would have more time to develop feelings for Shiki, but perhaps I’m only nitpicking? It’s a tendency of mine.

Either way, consider this story faved. :)

- Harumaki

P.S. What does the title mean, I wonder?

LOL I loved this!

So cute! And scandalous! [jk] But it was very well-written. Well done!

very fluffy,but good.I liked the count down.

nice story love it.

hm...I think you should fix the tense of the story. It's all in present time, when it should be in past time at some points.

aw so kawaii!I luv it!lol poor Neku that slap probably left him a mark for a bit.

They order, and though Beat won't touch his 'surprise' ramen (What the heck kinda food is this?), Rhyme and Shiki hum to a tuneless tune, slurping and chewing contentedly.

Neku would do the same, but he's too cool for that. No reason to eat with fervor. Enjoy the moment.

Lulz at that. That's so Neku, I can't even describe it. (:

I like how everything is so amazingly in character. Like, Beat not only with his "gangster" talk that everyone picks up on, but the subtler things; his whole adversion to his real name, and his... not exactly high level vocabulary.

And the whole thing is just speckled with random bits of humor that makes me chuckle out loud.

"He'd have to make sure she ate more...being dead probably isn't good for maintaining a healthy form" - total rofl material right there.

Aw, I love it! Exept for the gibb- erm, Japanese I assume, to tally original and awesome. SEQUELS we say.

...SEQUEL.

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...sequel.