That was beautiful! I love how you always referred to him as "the boy". And Lily's spontaneity was really fun! Great story!

very nice! Loved how you wrote it all in third person :)

loved your story! maybe you should put in more dialog so that you could have a feel of being there - but other than that well done .

damn cute :)

Another great fic! I love this line:

"But, nonetheless, she's always been a bit of a liar with a cruel streak that occasionally alarms her."

I think that's the Lily I've always pictured. Not that pure virginial type that most fics try to potray, but the girl who was friends with Severus, the one who tried to hide her smile when his underpants were shown, arrogant in her own right, but deep down, still a good person. Well done!

This is very sweet! I love it :) I liked the different style - it's something I tried before and never quite got right, but you pull it off masterfully :D

i loved it! great one shot!

this is really good ohh please b a seuel

good job

i really liked the way you wrote this story. definitely a terrific oneshot. and original too. keep it up! i'm going to check out your page to see what other stories you've got...

:)

wow, i liked that alot. :)

haha i liked how you added in the little detail of James blushing when he sees Lily in her underwear.

cutee!

this is really sweet. So optimistic.

i loved it! i absolutely adored your pov- very masterfully done! this is so cute! fabulous job!

that was WONDEFUL. really, really good. very well-written. good job!

That was so sweet! I loved it!