Oh wow. This is very entertaining. I love it! Even if it's short, you should feel proud that you have no dialog! The grammar isn't perfect, but it's something I overlooked due to how amazing this was. Great job!

your story is realy amazing. kind of poethik. you should write more of them, it's this form of horror or angst that makes films like the village so amazing.

that was cool!

{appears} you should be proud of yourself, this was very very good :) {vanishes}