oh my GOSH! You made Dr. Who... into JAKE!? you are reallllly sneaky. of course he was talking about the FIRST novel! ANNNND he likes Werewolves, not VAMPIRES! WOW!

So... Edward and Dr...Whoever-He-is have a strong resemblance, do they? I think that's what Dr. Who.. would have said, something about how "the main character" matches his own physicality/personality. I bet a sister or cousin or female friend said something to Dr. Who... after reading the book. So when Bella wakes up, after resolving whatever is going on in Imagination Land, she's going to meet Dr. Who... and live happily ever after!

Lauren would be a better villain (have you read Written in the Stars-she's a great villain with a grudge!), Jessica is just petty and pouty, the doesn't really have the nerve to be all out EVIL! or the smarts.

Yes, I will acknowledge here that I am picky and petty about this, but it makes me wince MORE when AUTHORS (who really should know better) misuse the "Your/you're" and "there/they're/their" in your A/N you used "Your" meaning possession, instead of the contraction "You're" meaning you are.

Hi. I loved your story! It doesn't really matter because most people don't know this but the ending has a factual error in it. A man can donate his heart to a woman but not the other way around. This is due to a woman's heart being slightly smaller than a man's which leads to a higher risk of death and so this type of donation wouldn't happen in real life. Like I said most ppl don't know and I really enjoyed your story. Just posting cuz you learn something every day right? Hope you have a good day and can't wait to find out if you've written anything else! I couldn't wait to find out what happened next which is why I haven't commented before this.

love it thanks

Oh my lord that ending was beautiful!

I could be wrong but what your writing Bella to be in is not a coma but vegetative state. Only in that state do patients react to stimuli and open their eyes, if they get worse by not responding to pain and such are they slipping into a coma where the eyes are always closed until they fully reawaken.

That said I love this story and can't wait to finish. It's so original and amazing

The 'poo' part of the rhyme was hilarious... If I kept on reading it repeatedly it might kill me frim laughing hard :P

YOU ARE A FRICKING AMAZING AUTHOR! Please, don't ever stop writing. I heard that you had died, so yeah. Why?! You are literally my favorite fanfiction author! You could have been a real author and made millions! So, thank you for all of the fantastic stories.

If your death was just some joke;
Why?

Wow awesome start

I'm pretty sure the doctor is Edward...

This reminds me of Supernatural - The Monster At The End Of This Book. The writer was confronted with two of his characters and felt guilty about the things he thought he put him threw.

omg just finished reading this! sooo good!

I knew who the doctor was all along. You gave so many clues in your story. The end though, with the "gave me her heart" thing was a nice touch. I loved your story! Very creative indeed. And you've given me even more of a reason to hate Jessica Stanley. Thanks.