you mean there is no happy ending for Ron and Hermione gee that is sad I mean it really really SAD!
not to bad tho.

Oh my gosh, that was so sad! Poor Hermione! Poor Ron!

wow. didnt realize it was so good. also didnt realize it was so graphic the first time i read it. really amazing writing though i'm glad i handed it over to you. keep it up.

esh...morbid as all hell. but it's still a very good piece.

I really like the darkness in this, but I can't help but think the description of Hermione's mauling really stuck out. You set it up so beautifully, andthen all of a sudden BANG, we're getting graphic descriptions of mauled body parts, etc.

For a little constructive crit: I think it could have been just as effective had you left out the graphic description and just said that Ron had found her and that when he saw her, he knew that Harry had been hiding Greyback's return.

I'm not saying it to be nasty, so please don't misinterpret me. I liked your story a lot.

OMG! That was so good, but so... um sick?

Wow, I really didn't see that coming! I feel for Ron! :'(

Had it been a bit longer I probably would have cried...

OMG, I'm really going to remember this one!

Excellent job! (y)

wow, that was something