Aw...now I feel bad for Dahlia and Iris!

I really like it! You've got all the characters and the reasons for why they did what they did in here and, just, wow, really! I hope you update! I'm interested in how Dahlia coped with killing Valerie because she seems very more human in this than the demon Dahlia we came to know and hate!

I was going to do a story like this, called 'The secret life of Dahlia Hawthorne.' Now I don't have too! Thanks! Anyway, really good story! Had me hooked from the start, too. You captured Dahlia's emotions perfectly. Can you do a sequel about how it was like being 'Melissa Foster?'

"This chapter is exactly 6 words long."

Makes sense, seeing how Dahlia is. :D

Great chapter!

A good story, though there are some things that are inconsistent with the game. Not sure about the ages of the twins when they have to leave, but there was definitely some other stuff. Dahlia never planned to jump off the bridge-she was counting on Iris to show up and do something, but when she didn't, she was forced to take drastic action. If anything, I think that was what truly started to twist her personality. The one person she trusted more than anything "betrayed" her.

Wow. I thought I'd reviewed on this before, oddly enough :o

Anyway, it's really good, and your characterisation is brilliant. Believe me, I know from experience how difficult it is to stay in character with one Miss Dahlia Hawthorne.

I love it :3

Wow. This was really well done. You handled Dahlia really well. It makes sense, now, how she would become the demon she ended up as. The separation of Dahlia and Iris was really tragic, and in the end, I can see that breaking her. Wow, I didn't even think of using that idea. Awesome job, looking forward to the rest!

I like it too )

I like it. :)