THAT SUCKED DICK!

amazing

Gay

The chapters are short but i still like it!

ok... I'm not one to critisize but I saw a few mistakes

1. at the end of questions you used a . instead of a ? this mistake makes the story confusing.

2. when you told what they were doing it was so bland (they walked to class holding hands) that could have been changed to (as they walked to class holding hands they passed by many students who seem surprised whispering to each other probably about the new couple) that wouldn't have been quite as bland.

3. putting "There Sora just asked it" or whatever you put at the end just makes it seem rude and uninteresting.

sorry if my critisism makes you upset but I'm just trying to point a few things out. Keep in mind this is NOT a flame. I said nothing bad about the story just pointed out a few mistakes. thank you for your time.

that was... wierd. I couldnt really understand what was going on because you had it in script form, you should try writing as a normal story becaue i got really confused

OMG! YOU GOT TO MAKE MORE!