Very funny.

Oh so sweet thanks for the very good read

Dude love the concept i can see this happening (jane stealing the keys like tha) it is cute

Nice job!

So cute! And yeah when I was watching that episode where he said he wanted to go with van pelt instead of her, and she looked so sad-ya i picked that up too! Good story!

well, lets see. good overall. good story line and good character development. however, you could work on getting your story more in character. when you write a story, most often, the lines describing what the person is doing normally is just setting the scene. explanation points and questions make it seem forced and unrealistic. see where i'm coming from? thoughts aren't clear either. they're... jumbled until you speak them. then, only then, do they become eloquent and easy to understand. unless your leading up to someone speaking, the thoughts are a mass of nonsense, really. one more thing. personally, i think you need to add a little bit more, let us say, feeling. not that your story doesn't have feeling of course, i think it's adorable, but you need to tell or show what the characters are thinking. it's good to give the reader a bit of freedom in deciding, but you need to give them a baseline of how you imagine the character is really thinking. gives them a starting point

now, don't shoot me, please, for going on and on about how to write a story. i really don't know anything at all. however, good story and good explaining what really happened in that episode. good job. i thoroughly enjoyed reading it

Marie

This is really cute and good.

*Alyssa

For a first time fic that was good. I liked it. You should work on transitions and descriptions, other then that great job!

Elodie~

Ah! I like it a lot.:) you did really good

Oh Wow! That was amazing and so cute. I really loved it, good job.

I thought something about the episode was off!

Rigsby and Cho didn't really have many lines. The episode lacked Cho's usual heavy doses of sarcasm. We only got a taste.

Jane was well...Jane, but in a weirder sense and Lisbon was def jealous when he asked Van Pelt instead.

Great story, btw.

Loved it! Write more!

Just cute! And Paint it Red was awesome (yes, way out of character), but did anyone else notice that the painter new Patrick's name before he told him it?

I love Jibson. I was hoping someone would write about Lisbon's reaction when Jane told her he wanted to take Van Pelt. Classic reaction. I was disappointed that CBS did not post that clip in their episode highlights. I have a friend who had to work that night and couldn't see it, she would have loved that scene. Any way, great fic, I love Jibson.

Good story! I would love to see a scene where Van Pelt vents to Lisbon about how Jane treated her.