Drat! I was hoping to see how it all played out. the darkside of hordak.

Wonderful! I was hoping to find a story that had at least some focus on them as twins. Very nice. I'll enjoy as much of it as there is. Thanks for writing it. I love comfort and family solidarity fics.

please update

I devoured your story last night. I’ve been staying away from tales about She-Ra because I always preferred the He-man shows as a kid. Your character development is wonderful. I could totally envision this story as I read it and I’ll be anxiously waiting for an update. You’re doing a fantastic job.

It's great to see Adora deal with her time in the Horde.

Regarding the Sorceress: can't she ask Adora's permission to help her? She is in really dubious ethical territory here.

That was a good powerful story you wrote about Adora and her childhood, and those dreams she's been having. Have you written anymore chapters? I hope at the end that Adam and Cringer dont' die, that would be horrible! I hope things work out with Adora.

Darren

update please i have been waiting it is very good so far please don't make me beg

Excellant story. I hope you are to continue it. I keep checking every week to see if it's been updated.

You have great imagination for how Adora grew up!

That was wonderfully delightful! I really enjoyed all the teasing...had a smile on my face the whole time I was reading!

I am ejnjoying this story immensely especially this chapter

cant wait to hear what marleena tells her, you have great ideas so far so I guess she'll be crying and her leg got broken training under hordak

from ben the girl with the boy's name

Intriguing. I liked the chainsaw idea and the family dynamics. The encounter with the 'sorrowful' house was uncanny; I wonder what powers are behind it. I thought Adora's speech in the audience with her parents would either be more formal, or - if she doesn't know how to talk diplomacy - more soldier-like.

Teela teasing Adam about his childhood flirt was hilarious, as was Randor's and Man-at-Arms joking about being married. Language notes: "her thoughts dwelled back to" sounds strange; I think it's either "traveled back to" or "dwelled back on/in". Generally, there is no comma before "and" when the ensuing sentence does _not_ have a subject of its own.

Adora suddenly running into secret identity problems was a nice touch. I can't wait to see this continued and whether the storm was just an interlude or part of the larger plot.

Nice fast update. I'm glad to see some action unfold in the story.

I loved the family dynamics in this, how Randor and Marlena and even Adam don't really know Adora (and vice versa). It seems fitting Adora would both enjoy and be confused by the sudden luxury. Are you going to write in Teela and Man-at-Arms? They're both very close to the royal family, especially Adam, and would probably make an appearance to meet Adora.

You're too good a writer not to continue this. I would add more.