Just consider me the guy who gave him an apple.

*bloodthirsty grin* and trust me, ninja or not, when they came for me, I dragged dozens of the fuckers with me into the afterlife. Now I just gotta learn how to haunt so I could torture the survivors. Bastards think just because I know how to be nice to a child that I can't be a vindictive asshole well I'll show them.

And yes I did like that random side character that much.

Keep up the great work.

not that i have anything against the chapter itself but it's length you could lengthen it or else it'll be boring to read just so you know i hope you'll do so in the future other that and some minor grammar falts and one or two words that is misspelled it an awesome fanfic :)

sgned: DVSP

I have not found anything wrong that is note worthy. It is just the style in which you write is unique in many ways. This story so far has been excellent for many reason few which I will list (one: your writing style is slightly 'gothic' I think is the appropriate word. two: you are the first to make the kyubi character as a true demon proud, wise, authorative, and honorable and thankfully not some 'wishiwashi' sap who fall in love with naruto either as a father/brother/uncle role or if kyubi was female lover/mother/sister role any of them just do not fit a demon that has been around for multiple millenia.)

This story is one of my favorites because Naruto really is a pure deserves all the companionship he can as villagers...

your're a great author

interesting

lol

Interesting...

your reasons for everything in the story sound...well thought...though there is one thing bothering me: Sandaime is no fool and has the ANBU. Even when the whole ANBU were corrupt and would attack him too, he would check after the boy from time to time with his crystal ball. It sounds kinda strange that he didn't catch a glimpse of all the beatings...

You should show some more talks from Naruto, though. He only spoke to a book and to the Kyuubi so far...you should at least let him talk to the Sandaime and maybe some strangers...

and it would be nice to read longer chapters. Your writing style is really...well advanced and it actually pains me to have so less to read from you...it's also a shame because you kinda create a believable dark Naruto that is evil because of suffering but kind in the heart...

Soo...please write some new chapters...if you're in mood or something *gg*

Mata nee

Keep it up, great fic so far. Looking forward to more.

I want to this read this story and I like these chapters.

interesting story, though it will suck if all his future enemies know and have mastered magic too. i wanna see where you take this so please update soon

-The Don

love how this story is turning out i hope you update soon

I find this to be an interesting start and look forward to reading more.

it is a very interesting fic you have here. i have dabbled my self into paganism and mysticism, but please, in you next chapter tell me a bit more background, or at least the name of the occult

wow, your story has a lot of meat to it cant wait to sink my teeth into the next chapter. sigh just wish that the chapters were a bit longer though but other then that its very bad ass.

i love the idea of naruto being a "magic" user or in this case more of a warlock, it nicely done and well put together hope u continue to update cause u got talent :)

TY,

blueinu

Great work.