Boooooo to Edward's reaction to Bella.

I don't like that Edward loved another girl, before Bella :(

You might want to go back and fix a boo bob in paragraph 9. You have her wearing a red sweater to school, but then in the next paragraph she is in a blue t-shirt. I just thought you would want to know. Other then that I am enjoying your story.

Not quite cannon. Mason was a lawyer, not a doc, and Alice never remembered her human years.

Your characterisations are good.

bella breaks into someones house and puts their clothes on...what a freak

and Edward lets her live there? WTF?

this story is all kinds of fucked up...that shit and having Edward love another girl...and mourn her for 90 fucking YEARS...WTF

let Edward have his WILL...bella can do better!
why in the fuck would we want bella to play second fucking fiddle?
NO THANKS

so he was in love with this willow ...but never dated her?
but he liked her enough to whine about her for 90 years and she isn't even his mate? what a stupid pussy

the chapter is called big girls don't cry...in the first paragraph bella is crying. So in the first chapter you let us know that bella is in fact NOT a big girl.
Did you really do that cheesy ass shit? good bye blue walls...good bye drafty window...good bye future! LOL
That was the dumbest shit. Way to make bella so annoying that I dont want to read the rest of your story.

stuuuuuuuuuuuupid

Thanks for an interesting story.

Wow, what an imagination you

That certainly was a twist

What? Bella and jasper?

A little confusing.

Bet she is sorry she ever went in the house. Lol

Scary guy