hope to see more chapters

Fantastic fic i Hope to someday be picked up, again.

do you plan to continue this you have not updated it in over 7 years

still kinda waiting on this to be revived

This story is dead and it shames me to see that..

are you never going to continue this story its really good and its a shape to abandon it ?

It’s not exactly consequential to the story; but I believe some of these things lack certain elements of solemnity.

Zabuza’s wording - while distinguished - did not have to be so expressive to carry his conviction to Haku. The amount of emotional investment seemed marginally out of place.

Again; when Anko hugged Naruko. While the affirmation is important to their relationship, it appears flippant with those circumstances.

With these in mind (as well as a past review’s notions) I recommend honing your skills in subtlety.

They don’t need much, but these exaggerated moments in scenes can be tailored to Improve the relationship as well as provide a sense of continence.

Naruko’s aversion to men. (Over explained / understated)
Anko and Yugao’s affections. (Sporadic)

Relashinship dynamics show huge potential in this fic. Every little detail/adjustment counts.

good story, I hope you continue, greetings, bye!

Here we go again. The opening mission parameters are being prioritized as a 'black-sheep eradication' mission rather than a 'White flag recovery' mission. I'm okay with cutting to the chase; but this would be a good sight for improvement. Try to avoid 'seeing red' as well as the 'blacks and whites' of the big picture. Make sure you give yourself a chance and opportunity to improvise.

Ah...and on the note of 'decisive' having a 'majority-male' patronage with reliable 'moral-ambiguity' resounding 'physical-distrust' implies that the deck is being stacked against naruko. More so than the jinchuriki bit and more than her 'nostalgic grandfather-figure' would be expected to tolerate.

Long to short: If/When romanticism has favorites; try to make them work with you.

It doesn't have to be brazen to serve a point. It doesn't have to be preordained to remark a pretense.

If she wants distance; let her have it.
If she wants change; let her make her marks.
If it's too soon: let it be; as it may.
Given time: all things are made fallow.
Time never quits. Time has no favorites.

Sorry - again - for the impersonal post. In terms of writing stories: I am frequently reminding myself that backtracking is an important skill. Patience is a virtue; but endurance is a relentless value. Keeping ourselves together is part of honing these skills.

That aside: the plot is going well. The progression is effective; but the clutch is a bit finicky. You seem to hound 'decisive action' more than necessary, but you also switch to a 'freelance liberalist' at times. It's an interesting style. I'm looking forward to seeing the story develop as well as your advances. Try to keep an open mind and remember to allow individuals time to develop. Good luck; and may the winds fill your wings, quills, and sails.

I like how you turned Anko into a housewife, albeit a torturing and perverted one.

Yes! Two of the elemental nation's sexiest purplettes taking care of a budding Yuri-Yuri cute blonde? You're my favorite 'Kaas-Kop'!

Grief over lost loved ones are always hard to get over.

I feel sorry for any guys that get hit with the Raiton: Dengeki Te No Jutsu in the family jewels by Naruko if he touched a lady in a unwanted manner. She'd be like fry you bastard fry. Update soon