dirty quincey bastards german desecents from hell

theres always evil whores like her cock sucker the whore of babilon satans whore

Press F for Ichiruki in the chat boys

In all actuality, the USA doesn't have a national driving age like most countries. The individual states decide, though the average is 16 years old. Also, the state with the youngest driving age is Alaska, at 14 years old.

Fucking retarded

An excellent story. It’s clear you spent a lot of time making sure the pieces all fit together, and then making the characters come off the page. Good luck with your original works!

Great story so far! It’s clear you took the time to make sure all the pieces fit together.

Maybe this is covered in a future chapter, but it would have been better to see why Urahara / Yoruichi / Renji couldn’t attend the coronation. It’s a once in 1000-3000 year event, and for any captain to miss it seems like an insult/political statement.

Okay, lets get down to it.
First things first, the title, summary, and tags are very misleading. This story has almost nothing to do with the things listed. The whole royalty thing had so little to do with the plot that it could have been removed completly and made no difference to the over all plot, to be honest I forgot that Ichigo was the Heir Apparent for like 20 chapters until it was mention in a single sentence towards the end. A better title for this story is "Sins of the Past" as this story focuses almost solely on thr Quincy massacre that took place 200 years prior. It feels like you were trying to do the royalty thing for the first 5 chapters or so then lost the plot or was bored with the idea. Plot threads were constantly forgotten and brought up quickly and jerkily, often with just a paragraph to summarize then moving on. Example of this was Rukia's Bankai, trained for it, got it, kept it secret for a month, then finally when it was time to share we got a short paragraph of, "So she explained it, the end." And the reaction to it was just, "Oh, thats cool, good job." Nothing else. It just felt like you were trying to cram as many cool ideas for plot lines into a story as you could in hopes something would stick.
Some characters devolep and got some good work in, but most just kinda react and do almost nothing but fill space. You were switching focus between so many characters that the overall development of them suffered a lot. No one really changed or really grew except maybe Rukia slightly and Kyoraku a bit more. You started off each character with what had seemed to be conflict, but then it gets swept under the rug. Renji, being the weakest captain, Toshiro struggling to improve, Ichigo becoming a Captain with no idea how to be one.
Onto the ending, it was anticlimatic mostly. Rukia using her Bankai was pretty cool I guess, Kyoraku's Bankai battle was also decent, The Marx fight was actually pretty boring and Ichigo's fight was dull. It was the Climax, the final battle, it was time to pull out all the stops, not find a way to arbitrarily limit his powers, thats something that you do mid story, so they have to over come it to become better. His fight's ending was god aweful as well. "I can't move fast move ." Wham, done. All the other fights, minus Marx, Even Rommel's, all gave the chance for the combatants to do something cool, to show their hard work, But Ichigos was just disappointing. Also the whole death fake out with Kyoraku was just in bad taste, he wasnt even dead for 5 lines before you said you could bring him back to life. It was pointless, either keep him dead or dont have the scene.
To finish up, you had critiszei Kubo for Not being deep, for being a good world builder and character creator, but lacking substance. Pot calling the kettle black in this case.
All in all, it wasnt a bad story, the plot line was interesting when you focused on the Quincy plot line, your fight scene's for the most part are cool to read, and your beginning was good as well.
Final Verdict
A soft 7/10 Fun to read for awhile but the loose plot threads, the degeneration of the main plot points, and the overall lack of pay off will leave something wanting.
I think you have a lot of talent, there were moments that had me engaged and I didn't want to stop reading. All it needs is refinement. You were redeemed in the Kyoraku moments where I can tell you enjoyed writing the most.

I have to ask, why was Daiken or Izumi not punished in the same way as Aizen, Tousen, and Gin and sentenced to hell. Their actions led to a full fledged war breaking out, created Aizen and the Quincy menace. And lead to the final destruction of the Captain-commander's son with his soul being destroyed. In your world you stated that a soul will never changed, wouldn't that mean they eventually they will do the same exact thing and breed sedition amoung the Gotei 13 and soul society to enact what they think is right. Honestly at this point im just hoping either Toshiro or Hina are killed by a Quincy ability to make repairations for both Yamamoto, his son, Chad, and all the other's soul destruction which they are directly responsibile for.

Dude, turn this story into an original fiction and I’d definitely buy the book.

I have always thought that Ichigo, struggling with his Hollow powers, was much weaker when fighting Grimmjow than when fighting Byakuya, and doesn't get back to his old level until, say, the end of the fight against Ulqiorra.

Consider how easily Byakuya killed Espada 7.

seppuku brudah not sepaku or seppaku :P not your greatest chapter but hey that doesn't mean this chapter's bad. idk but i like your beach chapters.

liked the story got to say though if your going to Bing up points on why bleach sucks especially for plot holes the explain the plot holes for your readers and ways they could have fixed them other wise it just looks like bitching with no point to it but i still agree with you with how it went they should of just cut it off after azien with some happy go lucky bitter sweet moments and don't get me started on how the espada lost when technically they were supposed to be stronger the the captains but yeah love the story i agree with you on some points even if it's still on of my favorites

First of all, I am not even sure if your account is still alive. Looks like you haven't logged in for years. Anyway, I'm leaving this message because you deserve a review; even if you never read it (lol)
Has been a year since Bleach ended, and I can't think of a worst result yet. Time made me realise about many of the things I didn't see because I loved this series so much and ignored many of it's failures, barely starting to notice until about the last 20 chapters, which were the most lameful for me. Pairings apart, the conclusion of the story was practically an insult to the fans; I'm serious, I ship IchiRuki but I would have accepted IchiHime if the uncountable mistakes made by Kubo were fixed. Sorry, for the blurb but I needed to say that aloud. The point is, after ignoring the sore feeling that the end left me for months, I decided to comfort myself here in FanFiction. Then I found yours, and I have to say it has really helped me to get over that 686 nightmare. The writting, the plot, the characters, everything is very well developed. Even if I am not a fan of OCs, the Quincys that you created are far more logic than the Vanderreich bullshit that Kubo gave us, apart from the character's previous lifes. Simply an awesome story!
Also, about those things you pointed out in the last chapter, I totally agree with you. I would also add that Kubo constantly repeated himself in many parts of the argument, like the SS arc and the Hueco Mundo, both with the excuse of the "damsel in distress". So many years, so many effort, many interesting characters and scenarios lost. In the end, he threw a universe and a story with enough potential to be a legend to the garbage.
Well, I prefer to think of stories like the one that you brought us as the endings that Bleach deserved. But we will have to live with what happened.
To sum up, thank you for giving this story a well-deserved closure, just as it should have been.
Ps: Sorry if I commited any mistake before, I am still learning English as my second language.
Best wishes :)

Now that I am read this fic after the end of bleach i must say your concept for it was great. Quincy war, Kyoraku as the soutaicho, that IS kanon xD And the past for yours characters that you made based on the hints. All of it is awesome :O