I thought it was beautiful. Your usage of those key words set the tone. Luigi is well characterized!

SMH

I love the description in this story .

this is simply amazing. a truly wonderful, dark, and well written fanfiction. Luigi deserves more fanfictions then he gets, so I was happy to find this one! I'll definitly be adding it to my favorites. I loved the description of the dog. It made it so much more powerful than just saying he found a dead dog that was beginning to rot! I'll keep an eye out for more of your fanfictions, because this is one of the best I've read!

Well, you have certainly proved yourself a consistent writer. And I definitely agree with you about that last point.

Great job, and I give you more points for mentioning Blind Mag, who, as you most likely know, is my favorite character.

Grade: A I could find nothing wrong with it.

Another amazing piece of work, and for the character that grew on me over time, no less. I salute you for your unique, insightful efforts.

-Weaselby-

LUIGI! LUIGI! LUIGI! LUIGI! LUIGI!

*stops and looks around*

Ha, sorry. It's so rare to see stand-only Luigi fics...poor guy never gets any love. ;)

Interesting take on how his murderous side started to bloom...although I suspect genetics might have something to do with it as well...with a parent like Rotti...

Anyways, this is instantly going to my favorites! LUIGI LOVE!

~Chaos :)