i am pretty sure that the author doesn't give a sh*t about this story anymore, but i am going to write a whole bunch of things to improve it.

For one thing, in the Joui war, everybody used a sword. Also, I don't think that the general dude would know Gin-san's real name. He would just call Gin Shiroyasha.

Another thing, four people can't take on a army. Gintoki and his gang also had the other Joui on their side, don't forget that. I

n addition, this story has 0 detail. You have to explain the situation more. Like, "A booming voice smashed through the deafening silence and commanded his Amanto troops to march forward. The troops knew that they could not possibly win this battle, for the Joui had the most skillful samurai that they have ever seen.

More sudden than the General's command, a human's battle cry filled the Amanto troops with dread. They readied their weapons, but it was a futile effort; a white flash ripped right through them at about a dozen at a time. The same word passed through the terrorized troops: Shiroyasha"

...sorry! i shouldn't have wrote that! That paragraph i wrote was horrible! But...still, it think the author should have put more detail into it.

don't believe my fellow reviewers. bunch of liers.

your story is plotless, boring, and you need to go learn english. or read books. that helps too.

and don't ignore words that you don't understand. dictionaries as annoying and big as they have uses.

this story is actually pretty good! i had a few problems with it though. i think that you need to check up on your grammar. the plot is too rushed, and you can spice up the story up a bit by adding some detail. other than that, i thought it was interesting. hope to read chapter four soon!

Please work on your grammar, your work is good though.