Ugh.. This bitching inside of Ichigo is getting really tiring, and it's not even halfway to the story. It's been going on and on and on.

This was so damn good.
I hope you will continue working on the sequel,
I would absolutely love to find out what happens next. Please update again!

Hi, i love your story alot and sorry about the guy that just makes me pitty them cuz theyre probably not loved or are ust self councous about themselfs the dude who cussed like it was the end of the world the only complaint is the grammar but this story is alredy complete so its ok!

Finally you allow these two to have a moment! It felt like it took forever lol

very good story!

The writing in this story is of the hoghest tier so far. Goodness gracious this is so good!

It Is Sad That Soifon Is Dead! Will Soifon Stay Dead?

There's a 90% chance you're not going to read this whole review, so... THIS FIC SUCKS AND SUCK MY D**K B**CH! Grammatical errors aside, I got to chapter 3 and was so far impressed. I was getting warmed up nicely (giggity). Then over the course of only TWO F**KING CHAPTERS, you managed to COMPLETELY RUIN the power scaling and the continuity; utterly obliterated it for your own biased desires just for the sake of short cutting the PLOT! Seriously?! You were on a role in the beginning then you must of just stopped giving a sh*t and punted this fic off of a steep cliff. This is where YOU went wrong MANY times.
You: "It's just fanfiction, don't like don't read, DERP" ME: 'Kills your pet, slaps your grandma with a 2x4, steals your cars' rims and lets a wolverine loose in your house, B**CH' "Now listen up"
1. THIS Retsu Unohana is a Mary Sue. I shouldn't have to explain this at all to you. She was never EVER shown to be that powerful in canon. You also implied that she's stronger than Yamamoto? You're stupid and have an EXTREMELY biased hard on for this chick. Don't lie.
2. Nerfing Yamamoto BIG time.
3. Ukitake not being able to say a TWO syllable word? You were just too lazy to make a decent bankai up, it's obvious.
4. Harribel barely survives Ukitake's SHIKAI, but is able to block Old Man Yama's BANKAI?! Did you honestly feel okay writing this turd out? Think about that.
5. Ukitake surviving with a baseball sized hole in the CENTER of his chest? Look up human anatomy retard. MOST Shinigami share similar vital organs and cardiovascular systems with humans, before you go smartass on me, *sshat!
6. Mayuri survives getting half his torso blown off in CANON, because he isn't human, but dies from a fist sized hole in his chest this time? Mmkay. Then another more human captain (Ukitake) in MUCH worse shape and more vulnerable than he was survives with the same injury? Hmmmm... I don't know bro.

I had other minor gripes, but based on your ass pull writing, without even reading more chapters I already know ALL of the main characters are going to somehow live no matter what happens or their is going to be ALOT of FAKEOUT deaths. Conclusion: This fic is trash.

Your story is interesting, but your writing is pretty weak. It's a bit lower than mediocre. If your writing was better, then this story would be among the top 3 bleach fanfics. This story I obviously done, but I'll give some pointers anyway.
Misspelled words in every chapter I've read. You obviously don't re-read your chapters before posting them or you have a bad eye.
Unnecessary words with quotation marks above them. An example, his mood would darken whenever he spoke about his "unnecessary dreams." The only thing unnecessary here is the quotation marks. Italicizing the word would emphasize words better.
The way you word things is weird sometimes. "Don't worry you won't die by those wounds." Who talks like that?
This makes more sense and sounds like a real person. "Don't worry you won't die from those wounds."

Fantastic read! Glad this story was completed even if the sequel is abandoned. This story had a lot of conflict and definitely kept me on my toes the whole time. I can't believe you killed off Orihime! I never liked her that much, and her interference pissed me off, but I was kinda sad when Aizen did what he did. You made Aizen 200% more malevolent in that aspect. As for the pairing, I would have preferred Nel instead of Harribel, but I suppose it was fine as it was. This story is a decade old last month, so even if you do not update, I don't mind. Thanks for writing!

This is pretty good. I'm a bit sad that Ichigo is on the 'evil' side now, but you need to read an anti-hero, villain fanfic every now and then.

Everyone is getting BOPPED so soon! :'(

YES THANK YOU SZAYEL And FUCK YOU ORIHIME!

Okay. First of all, NO. WHY SZAYEL,WHY? Why did you betray them? You are a two-faced BaStArD and I’ll kill you with a chair. You will NOT get in the way of my ship. And second of all, I love the fact that you’re changing everything up, such as the captains, lieutenants, Soul Society, and Hueco Mundo. This story is really well written, no wonder it got over 2k reads.
Thank you for writing this!
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Aresanamu

that was some retarded conversation between Ichigo and Orihime. Her crush is empty slate with moronic mind. And all she does speak few words...