This would be a lot better in a different writing firmat. Good job though. I love the pairing. :)

This would have been a hell of a lot better if it wasn't in script format, which, by the way, is against the rules and regulations.

Could you rewrite this in story format? I like the idea of SaixKabuto with Kabuto on the bottom. I like Uke!Kabuto with a pairing that isn't OroKabu - I can't stand that pairing!