I just got to say this is really good I cant wait to continue reading

You know something, I like how you level out your SI's abilities, and level him with the other main characters, instead of the extremes of having him constantly in the background, or outright stealing the spotlight from the official hero of the original game (in this case, Zidane).

Well, DUH! Everyone knows that the one trait all Final Fantasy characters share is the ability to survive falls of invinite height. And Ron is, essentially, a Final Fantasy character, so...

So, Ron's Fight Arts abilities are, in a nutshell, Zell and Tifa's limit breaks, right? I just know it will include some Final Heaven variant. Don't get me wrong, I think this is awesome.

Over all 8/10

There are a couple of small world mistakes -
there are male guards in Treno, which is part of Alexandria, and if you get a perfect game in tetra master, you get all the cards. "

Also there is one evident grammatical error. With "and he had a tail" is a runon. I would suggest deleting the first 'and'.

"blue pants, armlets with gray gloves and boots, and he had a tail!

Awesome story! This is an instant Fav

I'm liking the story so far. the descriptions are acurate and they really suck you into the game's world. One small point of critisism though: sometimes you tend to leave words out, which makes for incoherent sentences. Only happens a few times but it still bugs me. But all in all, it's a goor SI so far.

Awesome story man this is the best self insert I ever read look forward to reading your other stories. Sincerely Shadow.

you should o one of these for ff 7

Ah finally in Lindblum and huzzah for Freya she's cool

dude i felt so sorry for vivi ... in the game and in here ... this is sure is one fic ... though it's just some kind of ... retelling the game just with one char more but i still like this very much

oh i like this story! it's very cool! my fav char always was vivi and i like the way he turned out in your story

o.o...O.O holy shiz nits, batman! i seriously wish i didn't have school tomorrow... i really wanna jump into the second story with a cliffhanger like that.

Dang man, you rock! makes me wish I could write! lol

Dude, I am seriously diggin' your story! this is deffinately one of the better self inserts i've read for a wh ile, and m only finished with up to chapter 3!

Stupid Kuja! Ruined a good Fight! But man it was good while it lasted! I love the battles, you weren't joking when you said people loved them! All right, Great First part of the story, time for the second!