I'm sorry, but I just can't see Anzu having feelings for Malik so suddenly after everything that happened in canon. Forgiveness is understandable, but feelings.. it just doesn't compute. I think it would have been better to separate the last part and make it another fic, one more AU kind of thing.

It was a good concept. However, you had some mix-ups, where Malik referred to Anzu as 'him' and Anzu referred to Malik as 'her'. It was in the segment with "The girl wasn't normal..." Last two lines.

Also: As for Onesided. It is not a word. It would be One Sided in the title, and one sided in the fic. You mushed together two words. That's all.

Otherwise, it was quite good. Good luck in the competition!

Aw, that's so sweet! Kind of sad as well... but as they're talking at the end I suppose that it's possible that they'll get together eventually.

I also loved the way you used Malik sifting through Anzu's memories, and all of the flashbacks. Very well done!

Great job on this fic, and good luck in the contest!

Bookworm

I really really liked this. It's kind of anawkward pairing, but that is what fanfiction is for, to make those awkward ones work. I enjoyed this.

TDH

Aw, that was sweet.. and a little sad too.

I realy like this sentence. It really stood out to me: "Then the girl spun around, so fast that Malik could not see the tears glimmering her eyes, as she unwillingly walked to her destiny."

So beautifully described. I like the way you have set up the story. It is different.

I also loved the phone-scene where Malik panicked and hung up on her. She called him back and started speaking, but then I got confused.. Did Malik even talk back or what? Hm... Oh well, you haven't made Malik too "good", it's how he is. He isn't bad, but he isn't an angel either. And parts of this story actually happened, so nothing to worry about there.

I think you nailed Malik quite good. And Anzu too; I like that girl

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