Well I think you should continue

plz rite more!

Oh its good, i should be longer

2 problems:

1: TOO SHORT!

2: YOU NEED TO CONTINUE!

Other than that it's really good!

Hey if you don't mind i have a suggestion for you... Ever should fake death and make roman feel bad and maybe he'll give the antidote to Damen since it's no use anyways. Then when Ever is "BACK ALIVE" she can live with Damen... AGAIN if you don't want you don't have to listen to me it was just a suggestion.

um... I don't want to be mean, but u got the wrong seris. This spot is for the seris, also called The immortals, by Tamora Pierce. I notice that when i was looking for this one, i saw a seris w\ the smae name, but it had the author's name in it too, an i'd notice that this story u wrote was supposed to be in there.

/book/Immortals_series_Alyson_Noel/

This the one i think you want.

Sorry if i sounded controling.

Awesome! It would be great if you continued! Please do!

i think this is a really good story and that you should continue to writing it. i hope you will

AWESOME! AWESOME! AWESOME! Continue if you can?

Oh God! I just finished Blue Moon a few days ago. This. Is. Awesome! Please continue?

Good but how do u know what gos on in Blue Moon it isnt even out yet!Goodluck

Your beginning is awesome! I really like it ;)

Hope you will continue this ...

awesome! awesome! u should write more!

You might continue this... You should continue this. I love this story... and I would love to hear how you think it will go. Please continue.

~Lucky

that is just how i thought it was going to happen.

love your writing!

i love the imortals books!