That was good. I liked it. Good job

i loved ROMANTIC

Nice story i really liked it -

nice i really like this one

Probably your longest fic huh? Looking at your Previous fics this is by far the most mature! So cute and sweet. I was squealing with joy! You ROCK SHELTIE!

Hm... a Halloween themed fic huh? I haven't seen this kind of fic in a while.

Anyway, I have to say that you really forgot to use punctuation marks in most of your sentences. That can really throw most your viewers off(including me) as they will not know exactly as to what way are they gonna read the sentence. The entire sentence gives of a lot of hints as to what emotion is being should be used when reading it and the punctuation marks really seals the deal. Besides, if I'm correct then its not really a sentence if there's no punctuation mark at the end.

And yes it is quite short for my taste but maybe that's because detail if exception to the start and the end of your story has been really left out. Maybe if you were to add a little more detail then the story wouldn't look so short in your eyes.

So in overall, the storyline and concept is good. But the execution is not so good.

I guess the length was the main thing that I found disappointing about this but I can't really say more than that. It was a good idea but it would have been nice to expand on it a bit more.

The main critique that I saw was you completely missing most of your punctuation.

Well my reaction isn't as powerful as Zea's but you still did a pretty good job with this. Hope to see more from you soon, keep 'em coming!

KAWAII!

it was short, but it was beautiful! :3

great job! XD