This was good, but I wish there had been more to it. Like what they did while they were trying to find a way back and some more/deeper interaction between characters. You did say things like what they had done but that was all done after the fact so it made a very short, short-story lol

That was rather pointless. Nothing really seemed to change and nobody truly learned so,etching. Why bother writing about it if everyone can pretend like it never happened?

That was...easy. Entirely too easy. Also, if this takes place after the last Immortals book, why is a war still going on? I wondered why they were injured, but I assumed it was an unrelated skirmish.

Time to hit the library, methinks. The Tortallans need to get home.

"In her state"? Come now, Daine. Is there something you aren't telling Numair? Considering the birth dates of her children, I assume this will deviate from canon or result in a miscarriage. I hope it won't, though. That would make sense, if it did.

Dear, dear. Daine and Numair are around whenKel starts page training. I suppose she actually starts probation, but that's minutae. Alanna is around at the very start of the year, before the letter is sent to Mindelan about the conditions. You'd think there would've been /some/ gossip. Eh. Who cares? I'm being a nitpicker.

Are there language differences? I imagine there would be.

The only finished story in this crossover and I loved it. The confusion about where they are throughout made me laugh a lot!

JUSTICE TO MRS NORRIS!

I'd probably understand this better if I'd actually seen/read Harry Potter. But I haven't, and am challenging myself to understand this fic. So luck to me 8D

Seems interesting. Again, issues understanding because I haven't seen or read Harry Potter, but seems interesting.

~EnharmonicAngel

I love it sooooooooo much, where did you get the idea?

this is really good! never expected to read something like this before, but it was really good!

I know this doesn't have any constuctive crit, mainly because I couldn't think of anything. That. Was. Awesome.

Now going to read the rest of it :D *runs away*

I liked it, I would have liked a little more interation between the characters from diffrent stories but it was still really good :D (and I have only read parts of the first and second Harry Potter~long complicated reasoning for this but I've seen the movie~)

that was good

well... that was just kinda well. without a purpose. sorta boring I guess. I mean, i live the idea of a the immortals harry potter and all, but there wasn't any adventure, or action or reason. nothing special. they just made a mistake, and got home very easily.