your story was great i want to read the new saga

ok wait didnt naruto just loved sakura in the first chap so why is he rejecting her now?

Also Hinata already confessed like you said earlier during pein's invasion so why is she following him to tell him AGAIN that she loves him?

also the naruto from yesterday was a hot head and now hes normal?

how could he sooo haphazardly return her feelings without a proper explanation then a kiss?its more like lust then love?

sorry but its really hard to judge but its ok since its was your first work but please do start third person as your story seems cutting from can now improve this in your story "sixteen years".that has more flow see you'vr improved.

you can rewrite this even better!

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cute Amy

well the way it is right now it is clearly he loves her and she doesn't punch him anymore.

*pouts*NARUTO YOU JERK!YOU COULD HAD ATLEAST GIVEN HINATA AN ANSWER!SHE NEARLY DIED FOR YOU FOR CRYING OUT LOUD!

sorry mental breakdown...

please continue

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Cute Amy

wow!so nice however you just said in the last battle that naruto's head was covered in blood...id the uyakugan also give him healing abilities?please do discuss this and its skill in abilities and its use in battle since its confusing...

also naruto as far as i know wudn't actually kill sasuke...but he deserves it anyway...

just tryin to help

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cute Amy

seriously epic but you should watch naruto NEVER EVER says "naruto-kun"thats what you say to a boy you feel near says preferably calls him baka or dobe.

also again if naruto is hokage he had to be did not have a scratch on him despite naruto surpassed the forth hokage?their an equal match..

sorry if im being hard but just tryin to help the "naruto-kun"part freaked me out...O_0

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cute Amy

seriously you were right you need to work on third person

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Cute amy

well...welll he gets to meet her now in the real manga!yep but Naruto wanted to tell sakura that he loves her?thats it!shudn't he crying over about not accomplishing his goals?

also what about hinata with minato didnt he just say he loved sakura?

gotta check it!

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cute Amy

OH MY GOD!HE DIED Al Ready?he just became close to hokage?

and what was tsunade idea about him being in a battle with a broken arm?she really is insane!kiba its just a puppy get over it...

but one thing you did make naruto a little tooo not strong as he lost from you see evn if he had a broken arm he had already surpassed the forth hokage and could had still beaten kiba...or was he going easy.i just have to find out by reading onward.

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cute Amy

ok like i promised i have started to read!and just love the beginning!also one correction its spelled "bijuus" because thats what I saw when it was subbed.

either way you'll get more feedback from me!

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cute Amy

Shoot! My email I gave you earlier, I left some stuff out, so just add 45 after the letters but before the . I have no idea if this is a bad decision telling you this way, since this is the internet. Oh well, decision made. Sorry. _

You did a time skip? So, now Ayame and Kiku have have 3 new sisters and they all have demon chakra? Are they the same as Kiku, who got her demon chakra from that kitsune village? Hope you can explain for us. I'Il see if I can get through to you online, and if I dont, then that means I screwed up along the way/made a mistake. I'll be waiting for that Bleach story. This week was fun: started a fire, power went out for a hour, and it all happened when we were taking those tests. Yep, very fun/distracting. Good luck on the project. D

Perfect again! So, is it the girl's time to go through the cycle? But don't let it be EXACTLY like Naruto's, give it a little jiggle, something to suprise them a bit. A rival team maybe? I don't know, but i'll be here to support you all the way! Have a nice break! _

oh the cricle is coming around. I like where this is going very nice job.

Draco122

wow very cool. SO muchg emoiton. I am glad naruto killed him. The red eyeed one had it coming. He treid to kill naruot's daughters he had it coming.

Draco122

I just got done reading up to the 15th chapter. Its VERY, VERY good! I love it. I dont see anything I can give you advice you on, you aced it. Im curious about whats gong to happen next. Another twist? Im also wondering how your going to end it. I love all the suspense thats going on. Oh well, keep up the good work. Hope you know who this is.