Loved the twist

good over all story with twist I didn't see coming!

This was sweet!

Hey, the ending wasn't crappy, it was kinda sweet. I'ts nice to see Naraku not the bad guy for a change.

lol i laughed at this story, everything moved very fast. i love it! 3 i was like o-my-goshh when kagome kissed sesshomaru. too fast but wow! imat a lost of words. good,no fantastic job

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Thorn: I think the nicknames for Naraku and Inuyasha were pretty cute, don't you think, Kisshu?

Kisshu: They aren't half as good as koneko-chan for my Ichigo.

Thorn: Kisshu, we talked about this. You are MINE! maybe not in reality, but in this alternate universe, I own you.

Kisshu: pfft, yea right. *rolls eyes*

Thorn: *pulls out official ownership document* This good enough for you?

Kisshu: *siks chimera animal on it*

*document burns*

Thorn: *screaming* NOOOOOOOO! NOT MY KISSHU-KUN!

Kisshu: *flying away* HA HA! Ja ne.

Kisshu: *gets trapped in hunting snare* d&mn it.

Random scientist person #1: YAY! lets take it to the lab and experiment!

Random scientist person #2: *jumps around clapping then jumps in car*

Kisshu: wh-what? where are you taking me! NOOO! THORN-KUN, SAVE ME!

Thorn: *yawns* nah, I'd rather not.

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*electric shock sounds*

Kisshu: *screams in pain* THORN-KUN!

. . .

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Thorn: Ja ne!

well im said it was so short but i did enjoy it quite a bit and you had a great ideah there, if you had of done a bit more work on that it would have been even better

NICE BUT AKWARD A BIT

Rocket Launcher?

And my class thought I was crazy when i suggested we through a shoe at a cockraoch attacking someones laptop.

How cute, you made Naraku at least kind here. It’s so cute.

I lvoed the end of this story. It was so awesome girl.

KatiechanXoxoXSesshoukun

awsome ending!

I couldn't read it till the end. Everything was just so sudden that it took all the emotion, sorry, you need to add more details and emotions, or else everything will look sudden.

The plot is a little interesting (a bit sudden tough), but you need to sharpen your writing skills, okay?

I will remain anonymous so that you don't hold grudges over me, kay?

don't hate me, that was just my opinion.

OMG what an ending it took mre by sorprice i mean wow this stoey is awesome awesome ending an love the surprices

Interesting twist. I like it. Wendy