I love this story, I can't wait to read more!

i'd like to see what happens next. don't give up!

Like this so far, looking forward to seeing where you are going with it.

Overall: I love the story so far. I am one of those fangirls that in ME1 thought it was stupid Garrus wasn't a romantic interest for the main character, because honestly he should have been. I love how you addressed how Garrus changed from ME1 to ME2, because I always loved his hotheaded behavior and then in ME2 he was like: "I chilled." I wasn't sure if anyone else had noticed that change. You have captured Garrus wondrously.

The only ways I can see for you to improve is maybe adding a bit more depth to Shepard's personality, she's a hard character to really give one to because yeah, in the game, she was more robot than person - but that's just my opinion C: Also, maybe give a little tearjerker warning at the start of the story? I was completely unprepared for Shepard to relive her family dying and Kaidan - wah KAIDANN.

Anyways yeah, I loved it and I didn't spot any glaring mistakes, good job!

I adore how you've captured Garrus in this chapter. Her ordering him to leave and him still saying no. Looking forward to more!

Nice work, I like it and I hope this wasn't one-shot. Your flashbacks were great.

Aaron, I know I already gave you feedback on this, but just wanted to throw again how great the story is :) And I just noticed a difference in the flashbacks-the first one has a distinction between adult and child Emily. The second seems to be just from one POV. I take it that's intentional?

Nice SHEPARRUS story) i hope you will continue..;) Kisses!