Very Nice

Just finished chapter 12
Why the fuck did you give eragon a shiki

Also I just wish to add that this relationship scale is so clearly favoring the side of Arya in so many aspects. Eragon is clearly the more committed and supportive in the relationship time and time again with his actions (even to a fault) compared to what Arya brings to the table. It annoys me to no end when Eragon starts thinking he does not deserve her or some bs. Give this shit a break. This shit is so over done it loses its charm. Even though I want eragon and Arya to be together and that is the only reason I read this story, the author has somehow made Eragon less like-able of a character due to his mindset and actions stemming from his love of Arya. Make him bloody interesting for crying out loud.

Eragon in this story is the ultimate pushover, he is the pushover above all pushovers, he is truly the most annoying pushover I have ever seen. I love the whole love, that the only reason I read this, but he needs to put on the pants in this relationship at least once. This is ridiculous, even when it comes to her life in danger. Give it a break for crying out loud. Eragon needs to make a stand for once. Also these so called “mature scenes” are incredibly dull. Like what the hell. Every single one is the exact same thing it is so predictable and boring. They kiss everywhere, he eats her out, and he penetrates her. Where the hell is the fun. Probably has something to do with him being such a pushover no doubt. There is no mutual give and take in these scenes. Nothing whatsoever. If this shit is considered better then what Faolin gave by so much then dear god this is the saddest immortal life I have ever heard of. Might as well end it early. I don’t understand why you continue to go in detail as much as you do when it the same shit every time. It is basically a copy and paste with somewhat different wording but not really. Which is a shame because I would otherwise really enjoy the lemons. Adds spark to the relationship. Anyways again seriously eragon really needs to grow a pair. There is no man in the relationship. Don’t get me wrong I love the absolute love in the relationship but it gets to a similar situation to that of the so called “MATURE SCENES”. There is zero spark. The lines are the same every time. Eragon is like a broken record. And it would not be too far if a stretch to compare Eragon to a loyal puppy at this point. And no one wants that. Anyone who wants that in a relationship have no life. This shit saddens me to the core. Well that is what I have to say about this story. Too bad that will never change obviously. The author has somehow managed to make the love in the relationship a dull experience. Truly an accomplishment I did not expect. Oh well

the funny part about this is that all it would take for him to avoid falling to evil would be to make an oath in the ancient language saying that he will not fall to darkness.

please write a sequal

God, the dialogue in this is so stilted and unnatural. I really hope it gets better, otherwise I'll have to write this off as a failure...

Mmm, I'm going to stop right here. I've got to agree with the other reviews that it feels like Eragon and Arya's relationship is going way too fast. In the books you can definitely tell there is an underlying attraction between the two but I don't think Arya is this deeply in love with him to consider him her beloved (vice versa). They're definitely important to each other, but not in this sense, especially since they haven't explored their relationship in a romantic sense. It makes this "love" between the two seem forced and unnatural and definitely not to my taste. I'm sure there are some who love it and are okay with that, but it's a bit much for me.

You've gotta be kidding me...

What a story! I love that you explored Eragon and Arya's relationship in such depth. Most other stories simply have it lead up to a kiss and leave it at that. Also, thank you for actually finishing this beast; there are too many incomplete ones out there. Great story, great writer, great job!

Great Story.

I absolutely adored every page of the story that you have written (an alternative Book 4 as I would say). Also, I wish to share my heartfelt gratitude to you for expressing Eragon and Arya's love just how I would love to see it, unconditional, immeasurable and irrevocable. Truly wonderful.

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Cool chapter. You couldn't get closer to Angela unless you were her. Great job with that. The delivery of the prophesy was a bit touch-and-go but I'm so curious I don't give a damn. I'm stoked for Super Eragon

Good start. The formal talk of the books makes conversation stilted and stiff, but you've nailed it. I'm intrigued. Onward to next chapter!