amy catches sonic. 5 minutes of stunned and awkward silence.

Very good point,good job️

You pretty much summed up every thing about the main couple. l always think that sonic fans are similiar to amy.

Wow this was REALLY good!

I think its actually made me understand Amy more. You've written this really well!

Great job!

OddSakura is out!

hm. that's a different perspective, but completely logical. i liked it

Sword: This. Was. Awesome!

I agree. It felt lieka true insight into Amy's nature and her logic about why she chases Sonic. Great job!

First, let me say this:

YOU ARE MY JESUS.

I was looking through the Sonic the Hedgehog section for some inspiration, and could find NOTHING. NADDA. ZERO. Just page after page of "OMG, REDA MU NU SOTRY ABOT SPRINT DA HEDGEHOGG!"

And then, like a beacon of light... YOUR STORY APPEARED.

AND YOU FLOORED ME. IN A GOOD WAY.

I haven't been on fanfiction dot net in a lonng time, and this was the perfect way for me to start off again XD

Okay, now jumping into "serious" mode... XD

It was a great one shot - good message, good theme, you didn't attempt to shoehorn in a plot, and yet it still had excellent structure. I especially loved the way that your ending brought the story back to square one and closed everything up so nicely with the beginning. It's like a deliciously wrapped box of chocolates XD

What impressed me most though was how you looked into Amy's character. I was a little afraid that it would just be another one of those, "Amy chases Sonic because she loves her and no one understands her and wahh wahh wahh" stories, but you really developed her personality. I really loved how you pointed out that Amy really wouldn't be able to be who she is today if she wasn't chasing Sonic. You didn't just point out that she has a strange sort of undying crush/love, but that chasing her also gave her confidence and made her see things as she experienced all these amazing adventures. It showed enough of the hopelessness that Amy felt without turning the story into an angst fest. Never once does Amy have a pity party in a dark room somewhere. You pointed out that yes, she has doubts for sure, but her mind has created a logic that... well, has no logic. I think that it shows that you really kept true to her strong personality.

In terms of criticism, I can't really think of anything, to be honest. If I really, REALY nitpick, I would say that the paragraph that starts: "Did Amy truly love Sonic?" felt like a bit of a bump in the flow of the story. I would've liked a better transition between her different doubts, instead of having it jump from her realizing that she was sometimes scared, to suddenly jumping that she wished her life was more normal, to jumping to being thankful, etc. They feel like they should be new paragraphs to me, but as I said, I'm just nitpicking XD

Overall, I'm very, very impressed by this story. In terms of the technical sides of writing, the grammar and spelling is fine. It has great structure, and it has great character development. I hope that I'll be seeing more of your work soon!

Keep writing!

azngirlchibi

aw, this is so cute! poor amy has it bad!