I just look at ur page and... Where is the sequel? - I know that this can only mean that you haven't written it yet and I can't wait for it so I hope you can start on it soon!

I love it! And I'm about to read the sequel! Hope it's a s good as this or even better! (There are spots for improvement but, no one is perfect!) also please take this as constructive criticism!

post the sequal soon please this is really good story

why doesn't she just tell them!?

holy crap i cannot describe to you how epic your story is 3

Wow...did not expect that

Hi I'm nobody just a being who likes your story. Keep writing

Wazzup up with the constant screamin?

Interesting dream/story.

That makes sense now with the Cullen's arriving so fast when Bella called Alice.

I thought it was really cute how Alice found out that the Death Princess was Bella.

I'm glad Bella went back to Forks and found the momentos under the flooring.

I hope not everything happens in the dream...the humans being killed for one-maybe..instead Victoria get's caught by the guards and maybe Bella has to deal with her?

Can't wait to read the sequel and read more of your creativity and imagination.

caww

Dear, I don't mean to give you a bad day, but sometimes you gotta do what ya' gotta do.

I read it. Well, actually, I skimmed it. First thing: GET A BETA. The grammar is awful and distracts from the story.

Second thing: If you have came across another story like this, NO ONE HAS STOLEN YOUR IDEA. This plot has been done a thousand times when you have crack pairings, just look up Alec/Bella fics.

And continuing. The writing is mediocre at best, terrible at worst. I know at times MY writing can be pretty goddamn awful, but I admit too it. Your writing is extremely rushed. Tone down the pace a little and include more details. At best, you give a sketchy mental picture. At worst, I had no idea what was going on at all.

Secondly: Use the grammar and spell check on your word processor and get a good beta. Your grammar is awful, and it distracts from your writing. If you had amazing writing but still had bad grammar, I would still leave a negative review. When you begin a quotation, you have to capitalize it. IT LOOKS TACKY OTHERWISE.

One more piece of advice: Don't take an honest review as a flame. A flame is saying that the story is awful and giving no basis of why or how it could be improved. My review is a critique. I sent it too help you, so don't go whining about me in your next authors note.

good story! hehehehehehe! Alice found out her secret! LUV the story so much!

lovee this story (:

please continue soon (:

Do you know what's funny? You started this story on my birthday :D

I love the story (:

Oh, I'm TOtally interested!