good keep it up

good story

drawntothenight

Ummm. Also, the treaty would have been broken if Jacob had come to the cullens home. But otherwise great job!

pls. update! nice story...

u can make it anyway u want. so u can let alice see him. its ur story. u dont own twilight.

I do have to say this was well written I cannot deny you that but why does everyone hate jacob. He's a decent guy he helped bella so he fell in love with bella but that was to be expected I'm team switzerland but give the guy a break. But nicely written

That is not realistic Edward would kill Jacob for that...for even thinking something like that!

love it!

It's sweet how Edward wanted to stay with Bella. There is one major flaw though. Alice would not have been able to see this happen. She can't see anything involving a member of the wolf pack. Other than that, good job!

Awesome. Write more :)

So sad...but very well written.