HOLY! Isn't Shiva a Hindu god/ess thing?!

Not to be a hater... Oh who am I kidding? Yes. I am a bit irked, but what I am about to say doesn't make te whole story bad. Just the important parts. I agree with Sanjana, Shiva is a HINDU GOD OF CREATIVE DESTRUCTION, NOT SOME FAKE ASS GODDESS OF WINTER. Just sayin'. But your writing is pretty good, so if you just change the name Shiva, you should be in the clear. Go

Just thought I would point out Shiva as far as Wikipedia knows is not a real goddess. There is an actual goddess of winter though. Her name is Cheimon, and you may want to consider editing the name so the story is more correct. Other then that story is good so far!

Forgoy to mention it it, but others have, but Shivra being her mother isn't accurate. Maybe her dad could be Boreas, god of the north winds, or a Horae, goddess of seasons.

Not sure if you're gonna see this, but Irene, the anon, you spoke my mind.

you need to look over Nico's view of her nightmare. you switched from Nico to Cortana without saying so

great story so far though

I likes the story but Shiva isn't a greek goddess. HE Is a hindu GOD. HE is the creater and the destroyer of worlds in hindu mytholodgy.

at first i admit when i read the summary i didn't think it would be good. but i think it is really good and if you were able to id say publish it.

Your character is not a Mary-Sue. I've realized that after reading 1 chapter. I've read dozens of fanfics, PJO or not, approximately 100. Out of all of the authors wit OCs, 3 (you included) authors didn't have a Mary Sue. Sad huh?

Lord Shiva. Is NOT a goddess, especially not some fake greecian goddess! Lord Shiva is one of the great Hindu Gods. He is the destroyer. A divine God, and any Hindu will take great offense to this story. You have disgraced him...

Jai Shri Krishna

Om namah Shivaya

Love the story so far! . How would Nico not recognize Cortana? Although, I guess the appearance would make her hard to recognize...

Awesome story sequel please

Well the ending was hilarious. I like this cahpter it's a good way to wrap up a story. Is it finished though? PM ME PLEASE!

STOP STOP STOP STOP STOP.

OC.

JUST SO OC.

Nico doesn't just like anyone, if he does, it doesn't take what, a week, two weeks with him, then BAM! He loves her. No.

Just no. But, the good thing is that it isn't as OC as this one PJO Dare thing I read...the persons name was Kaitlin or something, shes been there for four days or something, they start playing the game (also, she is an annoying daughter of Apollo) and one dares Nico to kiss the OOC and she describes it like:

"And then something there was a ping- a spark, or something magical! It just felt right, kissing him..."

And I was all like:

"First off, Nico would be cold as death, and being a son of Hades, kissing him would be very painful. Girl, this is soooo OC, he doesn't just meet some daughter of Apollo then after four days falls in love with her."

A quote from last chapter:

" I mean abusive parents, a foster kid, and She got all those brusies and scars from her parents not from being attacked by monsters"

If you don't know what a Mary-sue is, it is the following:

The girl or boy has been abused by their parent(s)

Is extremely beautiful (EXAMPLE: Although the hair was short cut to her shoulders, it was a pale, beautiful blonde. Her skin was a milky white, and eyes were clear sky blue that could be easily lost into. Her body was the perfect slender, hour glass shape, and face like a heart.)

Has an unusual name or has a name that is really long (EXAMPLE: Angelinaquil Amber Opal Soar

And, is really powerful.)

This is why people identify Cortana as a Mary-Sue. Because she is.